(my warpaint is) sharpie ink

[dirtykicks]

(my warpaint is) sharpie ink

ryan-centric gen, pg
1521 words
by girlintheband

title by kimya dawson. much stylistic inspiration from e.e. cummings. this is something that is very experimental but i'm in that mood where you just have to put things out there regardless. thank you to softlyforgotten, alchemywow and miznarrator for looking at this in its various stages of existence. ♥

Comments

[sirritwist]

I really liked this :)

[softlyforgotten]

i still love this so much, god. you get this idea of ryan so perfectly and somehow manage to pin him down to the page (elusive as crazy!ryan must be). the mentions of the others breaks my heart, and i love so, so much the little (wait for it). ♥♥♥♥♥

[flimsy]

♥♥♥

I loved this first when you sent me the beginning, and I just love the ending you came up with, the conclusion. I love how you just feel how Ryan goes crazy slowly, and how nobody really understands? The shattered, stilted feel of this, and how you used punctuation/syntax to go with Ryan's distorted thoughts, that's just so amazing.
*flails at you*

[x_smartie]

Wow, I love this, and I love the structure - it worked so well, really got the feeling of Ryan going crazy across ♥

[saturnalia]

I like it! It's very easy to get this style completely wrong (hi there, teenie poets who think throwing random punctuation in everywhere makes them ~edgy) but you did it very well. And I adore your Ryan characterisation <3