Weak in the Knees; chapter forty-two
Title: Weak in the Knees
Author: Dhamphir
Fandom: X-Files
Pairing: Scully/OFC
Rating: NC-17
Please see previous posts for disclaimer/summary/notes. Special thanks to bara_brith. As always, thanks to celievamp for the beta.
( Chapter 42 )
I had a thought when I read the part about the Director's visit. I think it would be nicer if, instead of assuming I knew what an SAC was (I didn't), you gave a short, meaningful explanation of the acronym and job in the narrative surrounding the dialogue where it was used. Morgan's thoughts, as it were. I did figure out it's an FBI term meaning "Special Agent in Charge", but I still don't really know what they do, who they report to, what they're responsible for generally, or anything like that.
I also think using "IL" instead of Illinois is a little bit misleading since Taylor is obviously saying the full word aloud, not the two letters 'I' and 'L'.
Boy, I've sure gotten nit-picky, haven't I? Hehehe. I just wanted to provide something of substance beyond the obvious, which is still "this story rocks!!!". Hopefully you don't mind.
Testament to your writing, these small things are about the only things I would want to change. Consider them when you write more, that's all I ask! :)
Great job with a great chapter.
AblatedCrayon
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Actually, that slipped right by me. Thanks for letting me know. It's been corrected.
About the SAC thing: 'SAC' was used, and defined as 'Special Agent in Charge' in chapter 32. However, I'm not dismissing your point. I didn't go into any details about their responsibilities, because Jess is not actively thinking about taking the job at this point. When, and IF, she considers taking a SAC position, rest assured more information would revealed.
I do not mind constructive feedback. Yes, it's nice to know you still think "this story rocks!!!" :D But there's always room to improve. Thx.
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