Comments | dgficexchange: ♥ <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/kaygina ">kaygina </a></strong> wrote "Fifty Years in the Making" for <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/eustacia_vye28">eustacia

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♥ kaygina wrote "Fifty Years in the Making" for eustacia_vye28 ♥

Mar 23, 2008 14:27

Title: Fifty Years in the Making
Rating: G
Disclaimers Characters and related things and places are property of J.K. Rowling. Edible Arrangements is an idea stolen from Ediblearrangements.com (they do have awesome fruit bouquets, by the way).
Possible Spoilers/Warnings: None.
Summary(if fic): A story about memories, growing old, the way life has ( Read more... )

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Comments 30

lyndsiefenele March 23 2008, 20:54:56 UTC

You already know this, but I like it a lot! The present tense can be hard to do, but it works well here. As I said in my comments, I think that it makes the different time frames more cohesive, which reflects the last gift of the Pensieved memories. Does that make sense? I'm trying to say that I think his gift of memories, or in other words keeping them present and important to him and Ginny, is well-reflected by the use of the present tense in the flashbacks to other anniversaries.

I don't know if I make sense, but regardless the fic is very good!

lyndsiefenele March 24 2008, 21:15:34 UTC

Thank you! =)

I chose to do present tense with the memories as a more vivid "re-living the past" type thing. I've always imagined that people looking at memories in the Pensieve would get that same sense of "presentness."

nbaeker March 23 2008, 20:57:37 UTC

awww cute! I LOL'd at:
"Draco heads towards the bathroom. He isn’t sure whether to laugh or cry. This year, the anniversary hadn’t gone terribly. But apparently, he draws like a five year old girl."

nbaeker March 24 2008, 21:23:36 UTC

Draco just isn't all that artisticly inclined. ;)

contessanatasha March 23 2008, 21:38:17 UTC

Loved it. I agree with Lynds, the present tense really works in tying it together.

Sweet, happy fic.

contessanatasha March 24 2008, 21:29:06 UTC

Thanks!

The present tense was a bit difficult because I'd slip back into past tense while I was writing it so I'm really glad it worked out in the end.

airmidm March 24 2008, 10:10:38 UTC

Adorable! I love that Draco couldn't quite get it right until the end. Him drawing like a 5 year old is priceless. :D

airmidm March 24 2008, 21:32:34 UTC

Draco isn't the most artistic person in my mind. ;)

The perfect gift can take a long time to find...or years to make. =)

humbuggirl March 24 2008, 13:17:08 UTC

That was adorable. Really adorable!

humbuggirl March 24 2008, 21:33:36 UTC

Thank you! Glad you liked it!