Drabble: Silver Ribbons

[dexstarr]

Title: Silver Ribbons
Author: dexstarr
Word Count: 500
Rating: NC-17
Challenge: Written for hp_humpdrabbles 2010 Humpathon. Prompt posted by scaratthedisco, and was "Lucius/Narcissa - corset."
Characters: Lucius Malfoy, Narcissa Malfoy
Warnings: Sexual descriptions!
Author's Note: This is actually my second attempt at writing just a drabble for this prompt; there is a longer version

Comments

[reg_flint]

Fucking awesome! Ok now seriously-
I love your depiction of the tendeness and cruelty of their relationship. Just slight BDSM hints, enough to spark my own imagination...thank you for doing so.

[dexstarr]

YAY! I am overjoyed at your reaction.

This fic has one of my favorite lines ever: “Please what?” he drawled. “Ask properly, Narcissa.” This is how I like my D/s, subtle and sexy.

I really like trying to puzzle out their relationship and interactions, can you tell?

[reg_flint]

Gee that passed right over my head (mild sarcasm)

[scarysnapey]

*hits self on chest to restart heart*

Just right off the bat, het BDSM is one of the only things that squicks me. And I consider myself pretty unsquickable. But when I read the usage of the word "sir", and her apologizing to him, it just makes my stomach flip over. However, that is just a personal problem that arises because of past experiences.

That aside, I think that Lucius's feelings are remarkably well portrayed, and that Narcissa's cheek and obvious enthusiasm redeem the parts of this that would normally make me queasy.

Awesome work.

[dexstarr]

*hugs*

I didn't really consider this overt, but maybe in the future I'll put a BDSM warning. I tried to make it kinda fluffy, and Narcissa as a strong woman doing it because she likes it (and enjoys it).

Thanks for continuing to read it, and at least I didn't make you feel too bad (I hope!)

[scarysnapey]

Haha, you didn't make me feel bad. The point that I was attempting to make was that even though I have troubles usually with this kind of thing, I thought that you did an awesome job. And Lucius and Narcissa have a way of being fluffy no matter the situation.

[dexstarr]

Oh whew, okay. Because I know first-hand how bad experiences can really fuck up your mind.

Thanks, I am gonna go grin endlessly now!

[deirdre_aithne]

Oooh, a fantastic balance of Lucius's inner animal with a bit of fluffiness. I really love the corset idea in general. It's very nice, and sounds really pretty on her!

[dexstarr]

Thanks! It's hard to write a guy, especially Mr Cultured Pureblood, so happy I got that balance.

And yes, corsets are damn hot, and I like them a lot. There will be a longer version of this, with a different take, when I finish it :D

[dexstarr]

I fail to see how this is a bad thing!

[thaneofcawdor]

You write Lucius so bloody perfectly... I've read this three times this morning and, each time, Lucius gets so much more authoritative and skilled in the art of getting his own way whilst maintaining some semblance of gentlemanly consideration for his wife's pleasure.

“I’ll expect prompt obedience,” he warned, grabbing her chin harshly, forcing her to look at him.
That... his no-nonsense attitude and the way he comes off as impatient, tired and needing release is really sexy. There's no other word for it, you make the atmosphere around him so hot.

He responded by slapping her arse; when she jumped forward, Lucius tightened his grip on the silver ribbon leash, pulling her back toward him. “Hands on the bedpost, and don’t move,” he growled in his wife’s ear. Leashes and the element of control they afford are my favourite sexual things along with spanking - it's so right for him to be handling her that way, with such ease and simmering aggression, you write such a vivid scene out for us that his grip and the firm pull Narcissa

[dexstarr]

Oh my, thank you so much! I'm really happy you liked, really really happy. I like D/s and control, and I like to think there would be some of that mixed in their marriage, and that both would enjoy it equally - ie, she's not downtrodden and being forced into it. I have this idea in my head that pure-blood society is decadent and full of things like this.

"I’ll expect prompt obedience,” he warned, grabbing her chin harshly, forcing her to look at him. My intention with this, and her having him leave the mask on, was that was her way of asking for some 'play' like this. It was more overt, but the word limit got me.

I love subtlety :D

Thank you so much for your lovely comment!

[thaneofcawdor]

I have this idea in my head that pure-blood society is decadent and full of things like this.
Me too! I mean, it's very believable when you look at Charles II, Oscar Wilde, the Prince Regent - lavish spending and the characterised versions of themselves that they presented to the world leads me to believe that when you have that much money and time, you seek more and more depravity and pleasure to keep from getting bored and just because, you know, you can.

Making Narcissa ask for it that way is awesome. I hadn't thought of that at all but now you say it, it's clearer in the text. I suppose it's just my view of Narcissa being totally submissive in every thought and action that got in the way.

My pleasure :D