Comments | detourtoyou: If I can just keep me at a distance (away from you)

detourtoyou

If I can just keep me at a distance (away from you)

Jan 25, 2011 22:47

Title: If I can just keep me at a distance (away from you)
Author: detourtoyou
Rating: PG
Pairing: Ryan/Brendon
POV: 3rd
Summary: All Ryan needs to do is look at Brendon one normal moment and know that he needs space or else he's going to ruin it for the both of them.
Disclaimer: Fake, fake, fake. A pretty lie I created in my head.
Beta: madewithstars
A/N: Written for a ( Read more... )

patd, fanfic, pairing: ryan/brendon

Comments 12

decratdemrgncy January 27 2011, 00:09:41 UTC

\o/
wow that was kind of heartbreaking, but really really good ^_^
your writing makes it so easy to feel the tension between the two. and i really like how you described what was going on with their faces (wow that sounds odd...but i hope you understand what i mean) :)
so yes...all in all, this was fabulous! :D

decratdemrgncy January 27 2011, 00:10:29 UTC

...:D FC! hooray. i have gotten one of these in forever *dances in a circle*

detourtoyou January 28 2011, 00:53:18 UTC

Thank you!
Hahah, I get what you mean with describing their faces. I'm glad you liked it though!
Yay! *gives FC cookies* :)

smileyoufake January 27 2011, 01:17:44 UTC

This is beautiful. It broke my heart. Brendon saying it's okay just... <3. Your writing style is beautifully amazing and descriptive. Keep writing, you're amazing! I felt every emotion and it made my chest ACHE.

detourtoyou January 28 2011, 00:54:55 UTC

I'm sorry! And yet glad that it could make you feel every emotion, which means me just a little of a jerk haha.
Thank you! ♥

kaseyjayde January 27 2011, 12:21:59 UTC

It's soo good, I have tears streaming down my face.
The way you write is just... just great =)
is this a s/a? because this story is great by itself, but if you continued I just want to see how and when Ryan says it.

detourtoyou January 28 2011, 00:56:50 UTC

Awww *hands tissue*
Thank you!
For right now, it's a standalone since it was originally for a prompt on anon_lovefest and I don't really have any plans to continue hhaha, but I'm glad you liked it!

beauvie January 27 2011, 19:11:01 UTC

I really liked the way you created Ryan and Brendon's bittersweet relationship. They send mixed messages with their actions. They hurt each other without communicating their feelings properly. But the fact that Brendon could love and accept Ryan despite that and vice versa... is très sweet.

detourtoyou January 28 2011, 00:58:20 UTC

Thank you! <3
I love how you can sum it up so simply :)