Aww, I love that Dean’s kept all of these items over the years.
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Prologue
Yummy hurt!Dean here. *g* I love Sam being worried and protective, and the way he keeps carrying Dean around. *snickers*
Favorite lines:
As if Sam hadn't seen him die twice already.
Oh, Sam.
"Motherfucker, put me down," Dean said when Sam lifted him off the ground.
LOL!
Sam concentrated on the living weight
Love the “living weight” description.
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Nice job writing both boys as, well, boys, in this section. I adore Sammy deciding the truck must be for Dean. Too sweet. And how bittersweet that Dean has to steal presents for Sam, and that John apparently can’t keep his Christmas promises.
Favorite lines:
He also had the two bucks he'd stolen from the table when Dad wasn't looking, back in that restaurant in Lima, Ohio; the waitress had been mean to him and Sammy both, and he didn't care what Dad thought, she didn't deserve a tip.*g* Dean stealing the tip back is too funny. But hey, bad service shouldn’t be rewarded, I
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This is such fantastic feedback. To take the time to pick out and comment on the things you liked, so specifically...wow. *flails a bit more* I just...wow. I can't thank you enough. And I'm especially happy that Lily comes across well, and John, too. It's very different for me, writing so many POVs other than Sam and Dean. Thank you so much. :D
Thank you so much -- particularly for the comment about Lily. The OCs scare me to death sometimes, and I'm tickled pink that her perspective works for you. :)
Ok, I've only read the prologue and 1st section and already I'm crying - way to pull on my heartstrings! I can't wait to read the rest (unfortunately that won't be until later as I must go attend to my children)
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I’ll just comment by part …
Prologue
Yummy hurt!Dean here. *g* I love Sam being worried and protective, and the way he keeps carrying Dean around. *snickers*
Favorite lines:
As if Sam hadn't seen him die twice already.
Oh, Sam.
"Motherfucker, put me down," Dean said when Sam lifted him off the ground.
LOL!
Sam concentrated on the living weight
Love the “living weight” description.
I.
Nice job writing both boys as, well, boys, in this section. I adore Sammy deciding the truck must be for Dean. Too sweet. And how bittersweet that Dean has to steal presents for Sam, and that John apparently can’t keep his Christmas promises.
Favorite lines:
He also had the two bucks he'd stolen from the table when Dad wasn't looking, back in that restaurant in Lima, Ohio; the waitress had been mean to him and Sammy both, and he didn't care what Dad thought, she didn't deserve a tip.*g* Dean stealing the tip back is too funny. But hey, bad service shouldn’t be rewarded, I ( ... )
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This is such fantastic feedback. To take the time to pick out and comment on the things you liked, so specifically...wow. *flails a bit more* I just...wow. I can't thank you enough. And I'm especially happy that Lily comes across well, and John, too. It's very different for me, writing so many POVs other than Sam and Dean. Thank you so much. :D
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