Saiyuki Fic, Sorrow Floats--Chapter 8--NC17

[despina_moon]

Title: Sorrow Floats, Chapter 8
Author: Despina_Moon
Pairing: Gojyo/Kanan
Summary: Gojyo has a surprising secret from his past he can no longer hide. Will it change everything in the present? Saiyuki AU. Mostly.

Many, many thanks to my beta readers, the amazing moshesque and the fabulous whymzycal. Those two have humored me and put up with months of whining and crying

Comments

[lawless523]

*sigh* This is just lovely. :)

I guess we get Hakkai's reaction in the epilogue.

And I appreciated how you worked the title into the story with him tossing the mementoes in the river.

[laurabryannan]

Eeeep! I'm happy that you made Kanan the bad guy here. Sorry to her fans, but I've never liked her anyway, and it seems the most plausible way to go.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

[thefacelessevil]

... uh, how did she make Kanan the bad guy?

[laurabryannan]

In the end, though, after everything Gonou had done to reach her, when he'd finally found her, she had … Gojyo didn't appreciate knowing what she'd done, and for the first time since he'd practically stepped on Gonou, he felt sympathy for the guy and a smoldering anger at Kanan.

This sentence works for me. I've always thought Kanan incredibly selfish for killing herself, so it mirrors my own feelings about the situation.

[thefacelessevil]

Still not seeing the "bad guy" part. She was violated by youkai to the extreme, subject to countless amounts of tortures, then after being impregnanted with the seed of her enemies - her brother is inches away from losing his humanity when he "saves" her. Yeah, she's so goddamn selfish. What a bitch. :\

Interestingly enough, the way Minekura developed Kanan's character later on it seems extremely out-of-character for her to commit suicide, so I just try to theorize that the tramua was seriously that powerful. So fuck Gojyo for even being mad at her, he seriously has no right.

[caeseria]

You made me cry, Des!!! *weeps* Not many people can do that!

I need to reread this later this evening when I am not at work and bawling like a baby. I still wuv you and think this is brilliant. The best chapter so far.

[geri]

Wow that was so darn intense. I could physically feel goyjo's pain at kanan's betrayal, well at least she was honest with him before she left.

But to find her brother all but broken much as he had found her except he stopped the real tragedy from happening to her before hand, and found hakkai after the fact stil quite an interesting fete i look forward to the next post of this story.

[lawless523]

You and some others see betrayal; I see moving on. After all, she was living somewhere far away and I don't remember an exchange of vows of fidelity.

Gojyo might have tried harder to remain faithful because he expected/hoped she'd return once she was finished; she probably realized even before this that she wouldn't but wasn't ready yet to tell Gojyo that, both for her own selfish reasons and because she knew it would hurt him.

There's no indication in the story that the reasons she ultimately gives for choosing Gonou over Gojyo were false and they make some sense.

I tend to agree with thefacelessevil that Kanan and other female characters are judged using a different scale than is applied to male characters.

[thefacelessevil]

I really like you. :)

[whymzycal]

I think this chapter turned out great. Really, really great, Des.