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Nov 29, 2006 03:54

Enter a mild looking teenage boy covered in soot and bent in pain. He wanders up and down the mansion for a moment, but at last realizes he's not in Kansas (or California) anymore when he accidentally pulls a picture off the wall where his medicine cabinet should be ( Read more... )

ashley raventon, cherryh!elaine, neil hurly, jackrabbit, introduction

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cat_inthe_sun November 29 2006, 15:24:29 UTC

"You look in pain. Are you well?"

typist: welcome to the world of DF, and be warned of Jackrabbits odd dialect. Hes from the future

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 01:48:01 UTC

Neil gives this man a weak smile. "I'm not well. But it's all right. I have company, and I think a woman was going to get me some Vicodin. At least I hope it's Vicodin."

I know the feeling. Neil's author has a way with dialogue I'm still trying to get a handle on.

cat_inthe_sun November 30 2006, 01:49:42 UTC

"Vicoden?" he asks, touching his ear. Kenner:translation: no equivalent. "I do not grasp."

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 02:05:33 UTC

Neil blinks. Of course, people who haven't been through the hospital wringer are fortunate enough not to know of this kind of thing. "It's... a really powerful analgesic. I don't like to complain, but the pain is terrible without it, and people know something's the matter. Much like you did."

cat_inthe_sun November 30 2006, 02:07:19 UTC

"Ah? You can't mend yourself?"

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 02:12:02 UTC

"I am trying to." But of course, being from the twentieth century, he isn't speaking on the same level as this fellow. "But I can't afford the time. The hourglass runs low..."

Finally starting to settle into a voice. Watch it disappear next comment.

cat_inthe_sun November 30 2006, 02:13:25 UTC

"Ah." he nods, not getting it but it makes it easier to just nod. "When Mad Sweeney is ill, person drinks poison," he offers helpfully.

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 02:20:14 UTC

"...I don't think that will help somehow. Well, I suppose the chemo was a sort of poison. It did nothing for me." Neil rubs his temples. "Where exactly are we? I still have a lot to do."

cat_inthe_sun November 30 2006, 02:23:07 UTC

"Poison...you know, JackDaniels, poison?" he tilts his head.

"Ah? We're in the mansion."

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 02:24:43 UTC

Neil smiles gently. "Jack Daniels isn't poison. But it may help with the pain, if there's any to be had...

"I'm in a mansion?"

cat_inthe_sun November 30 2006, 02:29:38 UTC

"Yes. mansion. And poison, yes. Gives a person belly wrack."

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 02:32:44 UTC

"It can induce vomiting if you've drunk too much. A mild buzz from one shot, however... How exactly have we landed in a mansion? Is it your mansion?"

cat_inthe_sun November 30 2006, 02:35:45 UTC

"Is everyones mansion. Prefer pipe, m'self. The drink is painful."

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 02:39:51 UTC

"Smoking can become painful. It has carcinogens. Makes lungs hurt." Neil half laughed and half coughed at the way he had slid into this person's bizarre syntax. "Everyone's mansion? Mine, too? My friends' mansion?"

cat_inthe_sun November 30 2006, 02:42:17 UTC

"Friends too. Everyones. Ah? No, not that what friend smokes. Marijuana, do you have it?"

your_caretaker November 30 2006, 02:48:51 UTC

"Marijuana? Yes, I know what that is. This place is debauched, isn't it? Are my friends here? Tony Hunt, Allison Parker?"

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