TIER SEVEN PALADIN!
Long time no write. I just got out of my chem midterm, and I feel agitated from the long day.
I was just thinking...
I want to re-write Retribution is at Hand.
Why?
Because! I don't want Derrick to start out as a mindless killer at first (although a large part of my hero is anti-heroic). Second of all, I want the second main character, the Warlock (I still haven't figured out a name for her), to be the first character to come to the scene.
Third of all, the Darkfallen seem to have a cool concept on them. What I'm doing, is her starting out, on her way to the plaguelands, stopping by a family, and having a first encounter with the creatures.
I'm adding another character 'swell. A High Elf Paladin. Some say they never existed, but if High Elven priests existed, so can Paladins. There are records of Elven paladins, namely the Blood Elven one who sends Blood Knights to defile Sir Uther's tomb in revenge.
He will be a more...guardian-type character. Sort of like Tyrael in Diablo. Yeah, I got Diablo 2 in prepreation for Diablo 3.
As for Derrick, there will be parts of the story where he will torture people, I won't deny that, and he is mostly a flawed character...a heavily flawed one. I don't blame who will take Th'noir Thassalin as protagonist (the Elven Paladin. It's pronounced Thinn-no-eir quickly).
The explination comes up later, during the hunt for the Scrolls of Revelations, scrolls containing Elven sorceress spells of invisibility. Not invisibility, per se, but something that takes the charmed creature (or object) to the Dark Realm. To those who are Loremasters of Warcraft like me, it is the shadowy part of the Emerald dream, what the world looks like after it fell by Darkness, opposing what the world looks like with no human or animal interferance. What is Darkness? Well, wait and see.
Anyway, chosen people can see into the Dark Realm, and since it merges between the present and the Realm itself, one could 'see' lies, can see through disguises, and can dip their own powers or seep from that realm.
Derrick is one of those people who were able to know this realm, that is why he can tell lies from truth, and that is why he has so many nightmares.
I didn't want to add a Forgotten Paths flavor into Retribution is at Hand, so I won't let Derrick see hidden parts of the future. Both for the reasons of Foreshadowing, which I don't generally like, unless very subtle, and the...lol, he'll be overpowered.
Now...where was I?
Yes...the story will go on...
Where...was...I? Yeah, I will bring glimpses of Derrick's past, but he has no amnisia, he just hates talking at all...except to scare people.
That's one of his perks. XD
He doesn't like being encouraged, he doesn't like soups, he drinks only water and very rarely anything else. He does eat, but is only constantly thirsty. No, he's not a vampire. I don't want to make him chiche'. I worked so hard for him.
His weapons are a hammer, and a sword inherited. His family has twin swords, and he got the first, the longest. Illun claimed the second.
Admittingly, Derrick is not the typical Paladin...at all. He says in part of the story that I intend to keep, "I do not save people."
And after a while, "If a part of me was like it should be, I would be glad to help the people of Corrin's Crossing...but..."
He stops there.
*Spoiler*
And another scene, after beating the Master of Scholomance, he drags him to one of the torturing devices that he (the master of the academy, not Derrick) keeps, and inflicts a gruesome two hours of torture, before the master breaks up, and tells Derrick about the Scrolls of Revelation.
Since Derrick already has one, he takes the second from the Professor, and sets off to the Ghostlands to claim the third.
He almost kills off the master, but Thin'noier stills his hand, and takes the professor away to the Argent Dawn's camp.
Derrick sets off to the Ghostlands, and after disguising himself as a Forsaken to gather two allies, he fights off the third bearer of the scrolls, and claimes the last scroll, before he sets off back to the Plaguelands, and rallies the Argent Dawn in preperation of fighting Kel'Thuzad's Liuntenent, Illun.
He gives the scrolls to Thin'noier to use them, and the castle (mansion, call it what you wish...it's frikking huge) appears. They fight their way through the defenders of the castle, and Derrick races off to fight Illun at the Throne room.
Extreme Spoiler, don't read this if you want to enjoy the story that isn't up yet.
(If you want a more comedic description of the fight, imagine the Beauty and the Beast fight, with Derrick as Gastuan. XD No seriously, it has some accuracy, as Illun turns out, he never wanted Derrick dead, and all he wants is to fight for Arthas, whom he believes is the true heir of Lordaeron, and his rightful king. He has a mournful attitude, both for feeling that he betrayed his brother, Derrick, and his personal moral fight gets in the battle.
About Illun...
He may be the grayest character besides Derrick himself, who is mortally crushed by both the death of Uther, (I'll bring you all a huge, crushingly sad description of Uther's funeral), Arthas's betrayal, who Derrick looked up to as a youth, the King's death, who Derrick saw many times and somehow knew, his family's disappointment in him (Derrick) for failing to be a strong wizard, and Thor'noeil's trust in the youth, which Derrick secretly thinks he does not deserve.
He feels strongly that he is the one who should be brought to justice, although he did nothing wrong. His moral fight with himself is so powerful, it is evident in the Dark Realm, when our Warlock probes into it.
"He hates and loves the Ring, as he hates and loves himself."
Well said, Gandelf. This also applies to Derrick...
Derrick: "...Gollum? Why?"
XD
Now, since that's off my back, I slept in today, but catched up to every professor, and they liked the idea that I came to their office hours, and didn't sleep in more. XD Who would?
I am thinking of rating Retribution is at Hand a T, for blood and gore.
Anyway, back to real life.
I drew a cool image of Derrick. Since he's not really 'good' by the normal definition, since he has no reluctance in killing, and no pleasure in saving...and he steers away from the typical hero, I drew him with Paladin armor, but his face hidden.
I did a better one, but it's shorter.
Wait, I'll go take a picture of it, noobs.
Crap, can't find it.
Oh, well. This old one will suffice.
And his face is masked, by the way. The hood looks retarded...I noe.
Hmmm...PEOPLE! This is TIER 7 seven PALADIN WOLTK lol
...I am trying to make this easier for people to google.
Anyway...I stopped trying to...
What? Oh, well.
Oh, and the old story...
The Dark Side, I had a nice dream about it. But the prince (protagonist) was a kid, and he did a little adventure, without knowing that it was bigger then he can handle. It has a nice Legend of Zelda feeling to it...the innocent brat. XD
No, I won't include it...
Well, to be honest, I am more focused on RIAH then TDS...I can incorprate a lot more cool stuff in RIAH...besides, RIAH ends when Illun...
No, no spoilers for the end.
It's generally a short story. I will make the second part after Derrick gets the Book. It ends there. Cliffhangers suck, I know, I hate them personally, but although I love the story, I want it to end fast.
It's classified as Dark Fantasy/High Fantasy. There are elements of horror in there...like...
Imagine you're in a small house with a family of nice people at the edge of a place you always hated and feared, but have to go into.
At night, the father of the family has to leave the house's safety for more firewood. You talk against it, but he goes anyway.
You all wait, the wife is biting at her fingers, the children cower from the sight of the dark night from the simple windows, and you wonder what's taking him so long...
Then, you hear a knock at the door.
You all fall silent. You are quiet because the wife froze in her place, and the children are mute.
The knocking echoes again in the silent household. You stand up, thinking that it may be the husband, but you know enough of the lands beyond this farm, that horrors stalk the night for fools who would do the thing you are about to.
And then, a rasping voice calls for the wife in her first name.
"Open the door, and let me in, Mary."
The voice is no like the husbnad, and you shiver despite yourself.
Outside, a wind picks up, howling through the brittle shack you once called a house.
"Let me in."
You know this is nothing like the husband...and fear strikes into you, despite your power. You feel something stirring behind the door.
And swiftly turn to the window. There, you see a dark, long figure draped in black staring at you through the cold glass.
Black-red eyes blink, as a dark smile spreads on the chalk-white face. Its long white hair was trickling blood.
!!
No, no vampires here. Darkfallen. And they have the bad habit of scaring people around, and killing them.
No drinking blood...It was awesome, but after some shows, I lost fear in that.
Want to know a bit of them?
High Elves, twisted by the Scourge and fel magic turned into the demonic Darkfallen. Neither dead nor living, they came to being not a while before. Who knows how they came...
But to our Warlock who is faced with a nightmare, with only the fragile window to shield her from the creature...she could care less how they came.
Another note, reading this in a well-lit room, with the fan overhead does not induce horror, as I noticed, as reading it in a cold night, with eerie music or the sound of the wind.
I do not claim to be a horror writer, but that IS scary. I had the shivers just thinking of it while I was trying to sleep...
...I like writing, but I wish I had more free time to do that.
I was just thinking...
I want to re-write Retribution is at Hand.
Why?
Because! I don't want Derrick to start out as a mindless killer at first (although a large part of my hero is anti-heroic). Second of all, I want the second main character, the Warlock (I still haven't figured out a name for her), to be the first character to come to the scene.
Third of all, the Darkfallen seem to have a cool concept on them. What I'm doing, is her starting out, on her way to the plaguelands, stopping by a family, and having a first encounter with the creatures.
I'm adding another character 'swell. A High Elf Paladin. Some say they never existed, but if High Elven priests existed, so can Paladins. There are records of Elven paladins, namely the Blood Elven one who sends Blood Knights to defile Sir Uther's tomb in revenge.
He will be a more...guardian-type character. Sort of like Tyrael in Diablo. Yeah, I got Diablo 2 in prepreation for Diablo 3.
As for Derrick, there will be parts of the story where he will torture people, I won't deny that, and he is mostly a flawed character...a heavily flawed one. I don't blame who will take Th'noir Thassalin as protagonist (the Elven Paladin. It's pronounced Thinn-no-eir quickly).
The explination comes up later, during the hunt for the Scrolls of Revelations, scrolls containing Elven sorceress spells of invisibility. Not invisibility, per se, but something that takes the charmed creature (or object) to the Dark Realm. To those who are Loremasters of Warcraft like me, it is the shadowy part of the Emerald dream, what the world looks like after it fell by Darkness, opposing what the world looks like with no human or animal interferance. What is Darkness? Well, wait and see.
Anyway, chosen people can see into the Dark Realm, and since it merges between the present and the Realm itself, one could 'see' lies, can see through disguises, and can dip their own powers or seep from that realm.
Derrick is one of those people who were able to know this realm, that is why he can tell lies from truth, and that is why he has so many nightmares.
I didn't want to add a Forgotten Paths flavor into Retribution is at Hand, so I won't let Derrick see hidden parts of the future. Both for the reasons of Foreshadowing, which I don't generally like, unless very subtle, and the...lol, he'll be overpowered.
Now...where was I?
Yes...the story will go on...
Where...was...I? Yeah, I will bring glimpses of Derrick's past, but he has no amnisia, he just hates talking at all...except to scare people.
That's one of his perks. XD
He doesn't like being encouraged, he doesn't like soups, he drinks only water and very rarely anything else. He does eat, but is only constantly thirsty. No, he's not a vampire. I don't want to make him chiche'. I worked so hard for him.
His weapons are a hammer, and a sword inherited. His family has twin swords, and he got the first, the longest. Illun claimed the second.
Admittingly, Derrick is not the typical Paladin...at all. He says in part of the story that I intend to keep, "I do not save people."
And after a while, "If a part of me was like it should be, I would be glad to help the people of Corrin's Crossing...but..."
He stops there.
*Spoiler*
And another scene, after beating the Master of Scholomance, he drags him to one of the torturing devices that he (the master of the academy, not Derrick) keeps, and inflicts a gruesome two hours of torture, before the master breaks up, and tells Derrick about the Scrolls of Revelation.
Since Derrick already has one, he takes the second from the Professor, and sets off to the Ghostlands to claim the third.
He almost kills off the master, but Thin'noier stills his hand, and takes the professor away to the Argent Dawn's camp.
Derrick sets off to the Ghostlands, and after disguising himself as a Forsaken to gather two allies, he fights off the third bearer of the scrolls, and claimes the last scroll, before he sets off back to the Plaguelands, and rallies the Argent Dawn in preperation of fighting Kel'Thuzad's Liuntenent, Illun.
He gives the scrolls to Thin'noier to use them, and the castle (mansion, call it what you wish...it's frikking huge) appears. They fight their way through the defenders of the castle, and Derrick races off to fight Illun at the Throne room.
Extreme Spoiler, don't read this if you want to enjoy the story that isn't up yet.
(If you want a more comedic description of the fight, imagine the Beauty and the Beast fight, with Derrick as Gastuan. XD No seriously, it has some accuracy, as Illun turns out, he never wanted Derrick dead, and all he wants is to fight for Arthas, whom he believes is the true heir of Lordaeron, and his rightful king. He has a mournful attitude, both for feeling that he betrayed his brother, Derrick, and his personal moral fight gets in the battle.
About Illun...
He may be the grayest character besides Derrick himself, who is mortally crushed by both the death of Uther, (I'll bring you all a huge, crushingly sad description of Uther's funeral), Arthas's betrayal, who Derrick looked up to as a youth, the King's death, who Derrick saw many times and somehow knew, his family's disappointment in him (Derrick) for failing to be a strong wizard, and Thor'noeil's trust in the youth, which Derrick secretly thinks he does not deserve.
He feels strongly that he is the one who should be brought to justice, although he did nothing wrong. His moral fight with himself is so powerful, it is evident in the Dark Realm, when our Warlock probes into it.
"He hates and loves the Ring, as he hates and loves himself."
Well said, Gandelf. This also applies to Derrick...
Derrick: "...Gollum? Why?"
XD
Now, since that's off my back, I slept in today, but catched up to every professor, and they liked the idea that I came to their office hours, and didn't sleep in more. XD Who would?
I am thinking of rating Retribution is at Hand a T, for blood and gore.
Anyway, back to real life.
I drew a cool image of Derrick. Since he's not really 'good' by the normal definition, since he has no reluctance in killing, and no pleasure in saving...and he steers away from the typical hero, I drew him with Paladin armor, but his face hidden.
I did a better one, but it's shorter.
Wait, I'll go take a picture of it, noobs.
Crap, can't find it.
Oh, well. This old one will suffice.
And his face is masked, by the way. The hood looks retarded...I noe.
Hmmm...PEOPLE! This is TIER 7 seven PALADIN WOLTK lol
...I am trying to make this easier for people to google.
Anyway...I stopped trying to...
What? Oh, well.
Oh, and the old story...
The Dark Side, I had a nice dream about it. But the prince (protagonist) was a kid, and he did a little adventure, without knowing that it was bigger then he can handle. It has a nice Legend of Zelda feeling to it...the innocent brat. XD
No, I won't include it...
Well, to be honest, I am more focused on RIAH then TDS...I can incorprate a lot more cool stuff in RIAH...besides, RIAH ends when Illun...
No, no spoilers for the end.
It's generally a short story. I will make the second part after Derrick gets the Book. It ends there. Cliffhangers suck, I know, I hate them personally, but although I love the story, I want it to end fast.
It's classified as Dark Fantasy/High Fantasy. There are elements of horror in there...like...
Imagine you're in a small house with a family of nice people at the edge of a place you always hated and feared, but have to go into.
At night, the father of the family has to leave the house's safety for more firewood. You talk against it, but he goes anyway.
You all wait, the wife is biting at her fingers, the children cower from the sight of the dark night from the simple windows, and you wonder what's taking him so long...
Then, you hear a knock at the door.
You all fall silent. You are quiet because the wife froze in her place, and the children are mute.
The knocking echoes again in the silent household. You stand up, thinking that it may be the husband, but you know enough of the lands beyond this farm, that horrors stalk the night for fools who would do the thing you are about to.
And then, a rasping voice calls for the wife in her first name.
"Open the door, and let me in, Mary."
The voice is no like the husbnad, and you shiver despite yourself.
Outside, a wind picks up, howling through the brittle shack you once called a house.
"Let me in."
You know this is nothing like the husband...and fear strikes into you, despite your power. You feel something stirring behind the door.
And swiftly turn to the window. There, you see a dark, long figure draped in black staring at you through the cold glass.
Black-red eyes blink, as a dark smile spreads on the chalk-white face. Its long white hair was trickling blood.
!!
No, no vampires here. Darkfallen. And they have the bad habit of scaring people around, and killing them.
No drinking blood...It was awesome, but after some shows, I lost fear in that.
Want to know a bit of them?
High Elves, twisted by the Scourge and fel magic turned into the demonic Darkfallen. Neither dead nor living, they came to being not a while before. Who knows how they came...
But to our Warlock who is faced with a nightmare, with only the fragile window to shield her from the creature...she could care less how they came.
Another note, reading this in a well-lit room, with the fan overhead does not induce horror, as I noticed, as reading it in a cold night, with eerie music or the sound of the wind.
I do not claim to be a horror writer, but that IS scary. I had the shivers just thinking of it while I was trying to sleep...
...I like writing, but I wish I had more free time to do that.