Comments | derrick_mace: Forgotten Legends.

derrick_mace

Forgotten Legends.

Jun 23, 2009 00:26

I'm actually waiting until Fluffy_Kururu sends me back her application for me to check up on with my Stylebook. I doubt I'd be much of help.

Regardless! Here is proof that I'm not as bad a writer as I print myself out to be!

Here is my I swear first story, and then I edited it last year ( Read more... )

awesome, re-write, stories, forgotten legends, cool

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derrick_mace June 23 2009, 00:04:08 UTC

Peer is a NPC in the game this story is based on. Unlike the quest-giver share he's given here, he absolutely does nothing in the game rather than be a medium of annoyance.

I'm really happy that you liked it. I should incorporate more old stories into Anorian world building.

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derrick_mace June 23 2009, 10:23:21 UTC

The intro to Chapter One-- I really, really, really like it. The back-and-forth between the ominous warning and the peaceful description of the farmer and his family... It had a strong effect that made me feel for the farmer, for the peaceful life he was on the verge of losing.

The first time I wrote this was when I was 14. Pretty younger than Paolini, and the changes are extraordinary.

This made me giggle. The world is ending, and this guy doesn't know or care. Nice lightening of the mood, there. ^_^

Edward's a carefree spirit. That's how I portrayed him in the story. He has a quite disturbing past and blood on his hands, but he always forgets it when he's happy.

Ordinarily, war stories aren't my cup of tea, but I like this one. What fandom is this based on?I don't really know if this classifies as a war story--it does have war, but the main focus of the story is the missions the Legend's Guild assign the heroes. In a sense, it's action/adventure more than it is war ( ... )