Fic: My Own Personal Play Thing

[demi_rabbit]

Title: My Own Personal Play Thing
Rating: M
Genre: Romance and Angst
Pairings or Characters: KyouKao, onesides bouts of TamKyou and HikaKao, and slight TamaHaruHika
Warnings: Yaoi, self destructive behavior, and mentions of public sex.
Summary: In which two children play a very destructive game, without reading the proper rules.
Author's Notes:

Comments

Re: my my, aren't we in an angsty mood....*hearts*

[demi_rabbit]

Grah!!! -spazzes over length of comment- 8DD I'm really happy you liked it, and I agree, I wish I had turned this into something more/longer/more developed - the whole 'i'm-just-using-you' theme is quite popular with KyouKao, I've found, and although I originally swore I would never write it, I can see why it's done! The Angsty!sex is always much better~

Hmmm...I took a couple of your pointers (now one of the parenthesis has become it's own paragraph, with little endashes leading down to it, and the other has also been endashed! Still, I'm glad that the few speed bumps in the paragraphing form didn't throw off the angst-o-meter, and thanks for the pointers! xDD Not only does the fic look longer now, but it flows a little better~

I've considered expanding this fiction - originally, it started with this cryptical scene where the dialogue fires back in forth, all about 'who's yours?' with Kyouya not quite getting it, and then when everything clicks (with Kaoru's not-so-subtle 'You can call me Tamaki...'), everything gets uncomfortable - but that eventually leads to the sexing, if I know my mental plottings....xD But that one was also going to end happily, and I just didn't have the motivation for that one to get written in one night to make the deadline xDD

Yay strong coffee!!! 8DD

Ignore the badfic! Join me in my goal to take over half the FF.net archive with quality KyouKao fluff/smut/angst/ BABIES!! <33

-catches hearts- -eats them- <333

~Demi

Re: my my, aren't we in an angsty mood....*hearts*

[ceile_chan]

It was a subtle adjustment you made, and it makes a big difference in the mind of the reader. Glad I could give you a little nudge of encouragement. Writing isn't just about the words, but how the words form an experience for the reader. I'm very conscious of that, of how the rhythm of the words resonates in my mind, how I can write so that the story flows and creates a somewhat musical feel for my readers. You do this well already, and little adjustments like these are stylistic tools that can be used to magnify the effect of your words.

Great job!!!

(and yes, I do ignore the Ouran badfic *cringes*)

luvya,

~Nee-san

(hope you enjoyed the chaps I sent heh. I'll pay more attention to that project after the holidays.)