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Original (crappy) Short Story

Jul 07, 2010 22:02

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faithintheboys July 8 2010, 19:18:24 UTC

You suck.

That story was way to good and way to sad and now I'm all emotionally drained.

I LOVE THIS. Holy crap. I love that at the end of the scene you end with pretty much the same thing and I love how this little girl slowly breaks down. OMG. And the name? Wow. Perfect. You've done well, young jedi.

Awesome sweetie, serioulsy dude. I just wish we had a bit more with the boy, a bit more of a scene with him so that we could know him and get close to him as Juliet had. It's perfect the way it is but if you want to, you could do that to.

Love this, awesome job! More stories please!

Ooooor you could write a scene and I could I dunno, like add to it? It might work, like a game. It doesn't have to be serious, just a fun story. Wanna start or should I?

deliriousdays July 13 2010, 22:59:28 UTC

:D
Why thank you~

I wanted to add more scenes with him but I just couldn't think of anything, maybe I'll be hit with a brainblast and add more, but I'm pretty content with it for now.

I think we should use the first characters we came up with for that big ass story we were gonna do for Writers and do a round-robin of sorts like you said. You could start, I'm horrible at starting stories (:

faithintheboys July 14 2010, 01:13:22 UTC

Ughhhhh..... would you kill me if I said I kinda sorta didn't remember those characters? I'll try something else then, you can go with it or I can start something else but here it goes ( ... )

deliriousdays July 14 2010, 02:21:49 UTC

Hahaha, no. I barely remember the story we came up with. :D ( ... )

faithintheboys July 14 2010, 19:02:08 UTC

Just as Paige returned from the kitchen with an empty tray, her phone buzzed in her back pocket. yea Rabbit, I'm just waiting for the instructions ( ... )

deliriousdays July 16 2010, 03:25:08 UTC

The woman only known as Turtle read the text her sister had sent her, eyes staring intently at the screen as she pondered their positions ( ... )

faithintheboys July 16 2010, 03:57:52 UTC

Paige read the text and took a moment to get herself together. She bit off half her thumb nail as she scanned the crowd, making sure she could get to the mayor and get out. Ready set go ( ... )

deliriousdays July 16 2010, 05:08:24 UTC

Turtle hadn't even been waiting ten minutes before the crackle of the radio gained her attention ( ... )

faithintheboys July 17 2010, 01:40:02 UTC

"Sure thing, dude ( ... )

deliriousdays July 18 2010, 04:59:05 UTC

Turtle's face was marred with a frown as she felt the cool metal of a gun being pressed to her temple and the frown only deepened once she heard the man's declaration directed towards her sister from the other side of the ambulance ( ... )

faithintheboys July 19 2010, 01:21:09 UTC

(I liked that, nice ( ... )

deliriousdays July 19 2010, 02:29:21 UTC

(Why thanks :D and I apologize for the length of mine as well. So short T_T ( ... )

faithintheboys July 19 2010, 21:49:51 UTC

(Another good one ( ... )

faithintheboys July 19 2010, 21:50:26 UTC

She flipped the album shut. "Gotta be fake ( ... )

deliriousdays July 19 2010, 22:40:37 UTC

(Thank you~ and holy crap, this got me in suspense wondering what was going to happen but then I realized I have to write the next part D ( ... )

faithintheboys July 20 2010, 03:20:42 UTC

(No problem. This is getting so good ( ... )

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