Taking Back Sunday -- Chapter 13

[dejectedmadness]

[Title] Taking Back Sunday
[Author] dejectedmadness
[Rating] FINALLY NC-17 for boykissing/touching/sexual contact/boysecks!!!
[Chapter Listing] .:1:. .:2:. .:3:. .:4:. .:5:. .:6:. .:7:. .:8:. .:9:. .:10:. .:11:. .:12:. 13/?
[Disclaimer] I am posting fanFICTION. Neither the characters nor the ideas belong to me, just the plot specific to this story. No profit is

Comments

[x_missdarko_x]

I still don't know wether to be sad Brian and Jesse are over, or to be glad that maybe John will get his chance now. I do know I wanna hug Jes because he's breaking my heart. Into very little pieces. Damn you Brian, for being such a pussy.

You describe Jesse's feelings very well: the pain, the apathy, the aching and the missing. He wants to escape his loneliness, but ends up feeling lonelier than ever. And what a good friend John is, seriously, that boy needs to be praised for his patience and his comfort. He's an angel, I'm sure. Must be tough, wanting Jesse so much but knowing his best friends motives are all wrong.

Oh, this chapter was so heavenly intense and emotional! Favourite line:
Corey spared a tentative smile. “He broke your heart?” he asked. Jesse nodded. “Mine too.”
Brilliant move to include Corey, I love it.

The conversation with John's mother was a nice idea too. It's sad he can't tell what's really going on. Though that doesn't strip the conversation of meaning.

I don't know, sometimes it's hard to pinpoint exactly why you love a story. But know I adore this and will keep looking forward to more. In the mean time, I will re-read previous chapters because they still kick ass, even when I know what's about to happen. They're hot and funny and so touching.

At last, because I can't seem to stop the praising, I enjoy your language very much. Things like "hovering under the radar" and "mooning over his ex", those are very nice expressions. In the world of fanfiction, stories like this are an oasis.

[dejectedmadness]

Wow, this is the sweetest comment! I don't know what part of it to address. I get so sad to think of Jesse and Brian broken up. Jesse is so heartwrenching. He feels SO MUCH. Like he can't stop himself from feeling, and that's all he wants, so everything hurts, and he can't help it. John is brilliant because he can see past himself and see Jesse falling to pieces, and instead of being selfish, he is the best friend. He's there for Jesse and it makes him frigging so perfect. Self-denial for the satisfaction of friends.

Corey, I thought, needed to be included more. I needed to give him a more obvious connection with Jesse through Brian. There is a correlation here that I didn't think I had adequately demonstrated in previous chapters. I'm glad it came out so well here.

John's mother is a doll. She is oblivious, but still pretty perfect. She knows just what to say to comfort Jesse, even if she is still sort of clueless.

It makes me feel so so so good that you adore my story. I work pretty hard on them, so I am really glad that other people like them so much. I'm never going to forget this comment though: In the world of fanfiction, stories like this are an oasis. Thank you so much! Really really thank you! I'm so happy you liked it!