fanfic: Five Days - Day Five: Anomaly

[deinonychus_1]

Series: Five Days, part 5
Title: Day Five: Anomaly
Author: Athene
Fandom: Primeval
Pairing/characters: Connor/Ryan, Helen Cutter
Rating: PG
Warnings: Slash, occasional mild language.
Spoilers: Anything through to episode 5.
Disclaimer: Not mine. ITV and Impossible Pictures own them.
Word count: approx 6500
Summary: Action, adventure and prehistoric peril.

Comments

[telperion_15]

I found it first! *does the happy dance of joy*

Love the interaction between Helen, Connor and Ryan - all so in character. Love the description of the dino attacks - very cool. Love the whole thing, basically.

But did you really have to go with such huge cliffhanger-ending-type-thing? That's mean *glares* But if it means theres another series to come, then I guess I can forgive you *g*

[deinonychus_1]

Phew, I'm glad it worked, thanks for that. I was having major posting angst this evening about whether it was right, and whether it needed more work, but that's because I'm a terrible perfectionist and this was the big finale.

I'm definitely happy that you thought Helen was in character, because I was worried about getting her right. And I thought after the complete lack of dinosaurs in chapter four, we were overdue some dino action. Besides, Connor has had most of the heroics so far, and I wanted Ryan to get his heroic moment for battling dinosaurs and saving Connor.

I am completely unrepentant about the ending, *insert very evil maniacal laughing here* and there will indeed be another series to tell what happens to the boys in the future.

Very glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for reading and sticking with the series.

[telperion_15]

They were both very heroic (and you know we all like heroics!).

And I suppose I can't really complain about the cliffhanger, cos it's something I'm incredibly guilty of myself. It must be that evil-writer gene we all have, that makes us want to be mean to our readers, despite the fact that without them we would be nothing. What's up with that, I wonder? *g*

[deinonychus_1]

Heroics are good, and it occured to me that Connor had grabed most of the heroic action in chapter three, and Ryan hadn't really done anything brave and action-y, so I decided there had to be shooting of things, and hand-to-hand melee with dinosaur kind of action in chapter five. So then there was.

That last line - I'm so glad it worked, because I've had the entire plot all planned out for ages, and I knew what that last line was going to be before I even started to write chapter one.

And we're not being *mean* to our readers, so much as leaving them with a sense of anticipation so they want to come back for more. Although, now I look back at the 5D series as a whole, I don't think I expected *that many* chapters to have cliffhanger-type endings. ooops. Bad me.

[fredbassett]

Oh my god, three years??????? Superb story. Great ending. I really didn't expect that. The exchanges with Helen were brilliant. I definitely didn't like her one little bit. Loved the reference to Ryan as Lester's pitbull, and particularly loved brave, loyal (and ever so slightly confused) Connor!!

I am definitely a Connor convert now, no doubt about it.

Thanks so much for writing and posting this series, I have soooooooooo enjoyed it :)

And please can we see more of these two? *pretty please with puppy dog eyes*

[deinonychus_1]

Thank you, glad you liked. And I'm happy you didn't spot the ending, I was worried that everyone would guess it miles before it was revealed (one of my proof readers said he guessed partway through the scene when Cutter and co turn up, but the other proof reader sadi she didn't see it coming at all).

Again, it's nice to know Helen worked and seemed in character (especially since she'll be coming back later in the next story arc). Yey, more converts to Connor!

"brave, loyal (and ever so slightly confused) Connor!!"

Wow! I love your description of him. That is *so* right for Connor in this fic. Confused Connor is very, very fun to play with.

Thanks for reading, if you're prepared to stick around for the long haul, so to speak, there will be a lot more plot for these two coming up when I've got my head round where I'm going with the story.

[fredbassett]

Oh I'm very happy to stick around for a long haul!!

I forgot to say before how much I loved the stalking by dinos scene. That, with the rustling in the undergrowth, was genuinely very creepy and scary and like with all your descriptions, I could visualise the whole landscape perfectly. Definitely raised the hairs on the back of my neck.

The little 'uns are always the worst! (with appologies to Munchkin! *veg*)

[munchkinofdoom]

The little 'uns are always the worst! (with appologies to Munchkin! *veg*)

I heard that!!!! *g*

But I know what you mean. First mention of the caelowhatsis and I was reminded of those scenes in the Jurassic Park movies. I think those beasties were even smaller, but I still shudder about that scene where the cruise liner nearly lost the little girl to a pack of beasties much like these!

And we have another writer to add to the gallery of proficient dinosaur wranglers! *g*

[hellcats_punk]

OMG! That was great!

I loved how you had everyone interacting, especialy Connor and Ryan. There is so much about this series that I loved I don't know where to begin.

That last line! Does this mean there is going to be more? Please say it does! *gives pleading puppy eyes*

[deinonychus_1]

Thanks, nice to know you enjoyed it. Apart from several bouts of fic-angst, I really enjoyed writing this series, so it's very nice to know other people have enjoyed it as well.

Yes, there will be more, I'm working on the overall plan for the next series at the moment, but it may be a while before I start posting the next bit. I need to work on it a bit more, and I need to have a break for a while - it got manic trying to post five chapters in five weeks (even if I didn't actually quite manage it in five weeks).

[rodlox]

super!!

I think we're using the same piece of brain -- There was brief flicker of something in her face; Anger? Hurt? He couldn’t tell. Helen turned and started to walk away. -- is a theme I'm using too in my Tewkesbury fic.

wonder if Helen gets tired of being compared to the Biblical Eve in all these fics. :)

>Connor realised the thing he had grabbed hold of was Helen’s jacket, and he let go.
Well...should his odds be better or worse if he had grabbed a bit south of there?
;)

Helen replied wrong when Connor asked why she was saving him...she should've circled him, finger on his shoulders and back, "why do you think?" in a moderately suggestive voice. Connor would've cracked!

I'm surprised that Ryan, when Connor hit him, didn't say "Exactly what did that woman tell you?"

Abby's got the best line! bar none.

[deinonychus_1]

Thanks. Glad you liked.

Considering the size of Helen's knife, I think if Connor had grabbed a bit lower, he might have lost the hand!

And you might be right about the scene with Helen tempting him, but that would probably have broken Connor's mind just a little bit too much. Plus Cutter would have kill him lots.

Abby only got one line in the entire saga, but it was one hell of a bombshell, wasn't it *grin*

[rodlox]

I suspect that, if Connor confessed to Cutter, it would go something like this:
Connor: "Professor?"
Cutter: "Yeah Connor?"
"I...There's something you need to know."
"Does it involve the Anomalies?"
"Sorta, kinda, yeah. Its more about your wife."
"Helen? You've seen her?"
'Biblicaly' he thinks to himself. "I slept with her."
*Cutter looks at Connor for a long minute*
*Cutter breaks down laughing*
*After ten minutes of uncontrollable laughter* "Thank ye, Connor, I needed a good laugh."

ps: yeah, Abby's a bombshell. (and her line is one too)

[deinonychus_1]

*recovers from hysterical laughter at the mental image of that scene*

I don't think Connor would *dare* confess to Cutter. But he would end up getting a horribly shifty and guilty expression every time he's around Cutter, and eventually when it had pissed him off for long enough Cutter would ask what was wrong, and then Connor would run screaming from the room! Which would be almost the same as practically confessing.

The question is, from Cutter's point of view, which would be worse - knowing his wife had slept with his best mate, or knowing she slept with his geekiest student?

[munchkinofdoom]

Bloody hell! You are evil! 3 years?! No wonder Abby, Stephen and Nick were stunned. Makes me wonder how long ago, in the modern time, Stephen had told Helen about them. And if Helen had purposely sent them back via an anomaly to the the future to punish those waiting for them. It would have been heartbreaking if the anomaly they ignored would have brought them home closer to their original time

[byrons_brain]

I've got the van ready, I say we kidnap athene and fred and make them write faster... you in?

[deinonychus_1]

*meep*

[munchkinofdoom]

First we shall have to investigate their dietary requirements. And nab their muses. Then we go for the van.

Proficient dinosaur wranglers require careful care and maintenance. *nods*