fanfic: Five Days - Day Two: Survival

[deinonychus_1]

Series: Five Days, part 2
Title: Day Two: Survival
Author: Athene
Fandom: Primeval
Pairing/characters: Connor, Ryan
Rating: PG
Warnings: Occasional mild swearing
Spoilers: Anything through to episode 5
Disclaimer: Not mine. ITV and Impossible Pictures own them.
Word count: approx 5250
Summary: Action, adventure and prehistoric peril.

Connor woke to

Comments

[rodlox]

my hunch: there's a threatening something between Ryan and the cave, keeping him from returning at the moment.

my favorite line: He was trained for this sort of stuff. Well, actually, no-one was trained for this sort of stuff, but after the last few months with the anomaly project, Ryan was the closest they had to filling that category.

I enjoyed this chapter a great deal.

Connor most likely knows that in power politics in chimps and humans, the alpha male tends to form alliances with critical males who aren't alpha material.

[deinonychus_1]

I couldn't possibly comment on why Ryan hasn't returned *evil grin*. But I'm glad you enjoyed it/are intrigued enough to be coming up with theories.

Connor probably doesn't really mind being the backup guy, he described himself in pretty much those terms to Stephen in the first episode. Thing is, he's probably more heroic than he gives himself credit for, escpecially when the people he's comparing himself to - Stephen and Ryan - are both action/survival trained and he's not. As for forming alliances, the combination of scientist + action guy is age old tried and tested, and it works, and you're right, Connor probably knows this.

Thanks for the comments. Glad you liked it.

[fredbassett]

Brilliant. Love the descriptions, the interaction between the two of them, Ryan teaching Connor to shoot. Love the whole thing. And what happens next???????????????????????

I need to know, and I need to know ASAP. Or I will shout, and heckle and prod you frequently with forks. And other sharp things.

[deinonychus_1]

*ow* *ducks for cover* Stop throwing things at me!

I go through all the faff of posting fic, and end up with an aerial bombardment of sharp objects! What's the point of a good cliffhanger if I don't keep you waiting for the resolution? Eh?

I take it you liked...? *grin* Thanks.

I half expected comments from you re Ryan's opinions on Stephen. I was definitely thinking of your fic series when I wrote that bit. I know what *you* think of Ryan and Stephen, but I went for a different take on their relationship.

Glad the scene with Connor learning to shoot worked, maybe all that geeky research payed off after all.

[fredbassett]

But as I once said somewhere else, "I'm a woman, I demand instant gratification!" *waits patiently, readying pile of sharp missiles*

No, no complaints with your view of Stephen. It's a wholly reasonable and realistic version of the same character. Similar(in some ways)types can repel as well as attract, so I don't have any issues with your presentation of him through Ryan's eyes. And I'm fickle! I always end up loving other people's take on the characters more than my own!!

And if I haven't made myself clear ........I LIKED IT LOTS!!!!

*eyes large pile of sharp objects and grins menacingly*

PS the geeky research clearly paid off - the gun stuff was spot on.

[deinonychus_1]

Squeak! *looks around for large shield to protect myself over the next week. Finds one!*

It is entirely possible to go either way on the Stephen/Ryan dynamic. In your fic-verse he appreciates a trustworthy backup who he can rely on in a dangerous situation and treat as an equal, in my fic-verse he sees him as a rogue element who's unpredictability makes him dangerous. Because I figure military types would prefer to work with people who have had the same training and so can be expected to react in a similar way to some extent.

The first major draft of chapter three is finished and with my proof-reader(s). As long as they get back to me with comments in a reasonable time I'm hoping to post next weekend (definitely going for a 'chapter-a-week' approach).

[partofthequeue2]

And Captain Ryan didn’t come back
Gah! Evil, evil cliffhanger!
I did love this chapter though, I really like the relationship between Connor and Ryan you've got here.

Can't wait for more!

[deinonychus_1]

Thanks, nice to know you liked it.

As last lines to a chapter go, I quite liked that one *evil grin*.

[munchkinofdoom]

OMG what a place to stop! Evil writer person... *steely glare through the monitor*

I, too, was cackling while reading Ryan's opinon of Stephen! It is fun to see how you and fredbassett take the Ryan-Stephen (note no / *g*) and run in completely different directions with it. Which is part of the attraction of fanfic, that two different writers can come up with differing relationships.

Ummm? If I start threatening and heckling and assembling a peanut gallery, will we get Day 3 any faster? *begs*

*g*

[deinonychus_1]

Woohoo! Does this mean I am upgraded from 'morally ambiguous' to 'officially evil'?

It's interesting now that both me and fredbassett have ongoing fic series featuring Ryan, both doing very different things with him, and largely the same people seem to be reading and quite happy with the differences. As you say, that's part of the fun of fanfic.

And I am completely unrepentant about the evil cliffhanger ending. Throw all the heckling, peanuts and threats you like - I have a shield!

[munchkinofdoom]

*evil cackle*

Yes, dear, you can officially be evil, but only if you do as you're told and give us Day 3. *nods*

Otherwise, no evilness for you! Fred and I are serious about this. We don't bestow the title of Evil to those who defy us. So gimmeeeeee!!!!

So, as an aside, when we throw peanuts with our heckling, would you prefer them shelled or unshelled? Naked peanuts? To accompany as naked Ryan and Connor sometime soon?

And don't think your shield is going to save you! I may be little, but I'm vicious... *nods*

[deinonychus_1]

"I may be little, but I'm vicious... *nods*"

The same thing has been said about me before. It's always the small, quiet ones you have to watch...

Shelled pistiscios are the way forward, saves me having to spend five minutes wresting with getting the shell off before eating. *grin*

Chapter three will be coming soon. Promise. It's chapter 4 that's giving me trouble right now. Naked Connor and Ryan, hmmm... *Adds to mental list of things to include - oh, wait, that was already on the list. grin*

And judging by the comments, everybody *else* seems to think i'm already evil for giving them that ending *hopeful expression*.

[seraphina_snape]

Such a great chapter! I'm really looking forward to more. You know that you're definitely heading the "evil people" list this week, right? Ending the chapter like that. Tsk, tsk, tsk.

~ sera

[deinonychus_1]

Thanks, glad you're enjoying it.

I don't think this many people have called me 'evil' in one day since the time I killed Spike in a Buffy fanfic years ago. *grin*