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debbris

black hearts { 3 }

May 25, 2010 21:45

Yunho hears a thunder - a deafening roar booming from his back.

If I were you, I’d be running to hell by now ;

Yunho lands in a strong defiant thud, chest flat on the floor - shaken up by the an unknown voice. Yunho is not sure what to make of it.

If he’s going to be confined forever in that place , at least Yunho should see who or what ( Read more... )

black hearts

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kattan69 May 25 2010, 14:07:14 UTC

I'm a bit confused...*scratching my head*...can you explain the storyline or summary of it. Thanks, dearie!...^-^

debbris May 25 2010, 16:05:38 UTC

Basically Yunho needs to escape that place ( Vice) but he has to save Jaejoong first. Jaejoong is being held captive by Master. In order to escape Vice, Yunho needs to kiss 3 angels of nights but before he can do that, he must fight the shinigami's cruelty. Each angel of nights belong to a shinigami.

Aigo. So complicated ne? I'll get this post fixed asap.

kattan69 May 25 2010, 16:16:31 UTC

Well...it would help if there is a summary or a small description so that we are aware of the storyline.

Anyway....let me get this straight on this chapter....I'm trying to understand how Yunho and Jae ended up there....is it because both of them got into a car accident so their souls/bodies are trapped in this place.

And the Shinigami Master has taken a liking to Jae and wants to keep him there. But also wants to entice Yunho to join them.

What do you think?

debbris May 25 2010, 16:28:26 UTC

I've put up a summary to the chapter. :)
They two ended up in that place not because of accidents or anything.
The first chapter was where Yunho's surroundings just dissolve & disappear, it happened to Jaejoong too.

The Master sure wants to keep Jaejoong as his and abt of Yunho will be trapped in that place forever, that one is correct. Shinigami won't let Yunho escape. They're there to test Yunho's love - an experiment on human's emotions.The Master just wants his Shinigami to have a lil' fun before he claims YH's soul.

Still confused?

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ohkuralover May 25 2010, 22:08:34 UTC

I like this! please update soon! ^^

debbris May 26 2010, 00:30:59 UTC

thnks 4 reading. I will update this asap.

dilovesyunjae May 26 2010, 05:00:18 UTC

finally, we get to know what exactly happened...Oh so exciting!!! so he has to go through 3 tests to get to jae, but he's not gonna be free right? a pact with the devil is never good, you're never gonna get out yunnie!!!! whyyyyyy????? *shakes deb by the shoulders*

debbris May 26 2010, 15:43:53 UTC

If the first two chapters are too confusing, mianhae.

I start to write supernatural out of curiosity and it went out very confusing to the readers.Gotta work on narrating the story well then. * palmface

Drama is what I aim for bb so yeah, Yunho is in a risky situation, possibly leading him to a dead end. Same goes to life. When reality hits one so hard, even chances and opportunities don't always give the result that one desires for.

Ah, ignore my loong explanation. T'was my poetic self talking. lol

dilovesyunjae May 27 2010, 02:51:47 UTC

hehe...what i got from the 1st 2 eps was that yunho is stuck in some sort of freaky place and its a bad, bad sign.. gahhhh...so are you gonna torture my yunnie??

i wont ignore your explanation...i agree with it..:)

moon1084 May 26 2010, 05:30:42 UTC

very very interesting indeed and i totally over thought it with the death and out of body experience idea lol! or maybe in this case, i under thought it.

love it hun! can't wait for the next update.

poor yunjae. suffering in the real world and not outside.

it sure feels like being in both heaven and hell. smack down in the middle. being able to see jaejoong but also seeing him being held captive.

debbris May 26 2010, 15:52:30 UTC

The next few chapters will be more intense, I hope. I want the readers to feel how helpless Yunho is.The mental torture and all. The fun will begin once Yunho meets the first round's shinigami.

And I'll make sure to make a short summary at the end.

I'm open for any suggestions dear. If you feel like something should be added/altered, feel free to tell. :)

moon1084 May 26 2010, 16:09:59 UTC

oh i get it now. i was telling my bro about this and he is like "is this like yunjae version of bleach/deathnote?"

personally i know a bit about deathnote but i never watched it but bleach is bad ass.

thanks i dont care what happens as long as yunjae aren't being raped or doing it with other ppl.

debbris May 27 2010, 01:15:08 UTC

I wtched bleach for e few episodes & deathnote 1&2. I got influenced by the idea of weird supernatural from there I think.

rape? no no. I can't write anything nc17 right now so yeah, no worries.

zoevo May 26 2010, 17:12:46 UTC

It was a little hard for me to follow this chapter; maybe 'cause I don't read supernatural fics much but the summary in the end did help a lot.
so I guess Siwon is the master and yoosumin are the three shinigamis (or maybe angels,hopefully, so that Yunho could kiss them).
and I hope Jae won't stay confined like that till the fic ends for I longed for some YUNJAE "incest" interaction. :P
Thanks for the update.

debbris May 27 2010, 01:19:05 UTC

This is my first attempt at supernatural fic ~ & the feedbacks that I get are mostly o_0 ;

yeah, this fic is too confusing at some point, I just have to put up a summary to go with it.

yunjae incest interaction you say?well, of course there will be one/two. Don't worry. I love yunjae too much I won't let them suffer much.