{SPN J2 Big Bang} Gunmetal Dawn - Fiction Masterpost
This story is the standalone conclusion to a story that I wrote last year called Dreaming in Cordite. When I started Dreaming in Cordite I wrote the epilogue that you’ll read at the end of this story. Well, a modified version of it anyway. However, last year, I ran out of time and didn’t get to write the story. It’s been haunting me ever since
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Their stark, sometimes bleak cyberpunk world is a great backdrop for the humanity of the characters. I'll tell you right up front that I'm not a CMM fan and often am mystified by how often he pops up in J2 stories, that being said if anyone could make me like him it would be you in this fic. His loyalty and devotion as a friend along with his intelligence in seeing the truth in other people made him truly awesome.
I hated to see JD take the route he did, but everyone has their own agenda and it's sometimes hard to let it go. He did a lot of good things for the kids, he should be remembered for those things, not his errors.
I have to say this, I don't recall ever hating a female character the way I hated Mirabel. She was utterly loathsome and I wanted Jared to literally crush her skull. I can't believe I felt that way, it's kind of frightening but I guess a tribute to the power of your work. Go you.
The family theme was as welcome this time around as the first, and my only complaint is that we don't see Josh's baby or find out more about Meg and Mckenzie. Just the usual background things but I liked these people enough to want to get to know them. That's always a good thing.
Just as a comment, I find it interesting that there isn't more detail for sex here. I'm a guy and sometimes if a writer gets that part right it helps the story out in a big way. The opposite is true as well. I have no doubt that male writers don't always get the details right when they do het or femslash. When something goes wrong in a sex scene it can be disruptive in quirky ways. I'm not sure what made you choose the way you portray them physically but I salute your artistic vision. Porn is easily obtainable, writing like this is much harder to find.
So I hope that you get a world of glorious feedback for this and you feel completely inspired to take us there again soon.
best wishes in all your endeavors,
Westley
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I have to admit, I'm not a huge CMM fan either. I don't particularly have an affinity for "asshole" characters, so I wanted to do something different, and I had a need for someone smart, insightful and not afraid to call someone on their actions. Between him and Josh, they're the voices of reality for the two boys. And I have to say, I'm really stoked that you like him. :)
I knew at the start of this that the decision to make JD a 'bad guy' might be a little unpopular, but balancing his view of Jay as a boy and what was best for Jay and the business was a challenge. I wanted to give him a little bit of redemption at the end, a realisation that he wasn't quite seeing Jay as he was, but rather as who he thought he was.
Mirabel, I added as the truly 'bad' character, someone to take some of the heat off JD and yes, she's a hateful character.
And yes, I didn't go into Josh's baby or Meg/Mac partially because there wasn't really space to put them in without it feeling artificial. I'm probably going to do up some timestamps to show more of those characters. There definitely seems to be interest in reading them.
I used to be able to blast away and chuck out a couple of thousand words of porn but recently, my porn-fu is broken. I thought of possibly adding in a couple of other scenes but again, I think it would have broken the piece especially seeing as seperation, isolation, and a marked lack of communication are central to it, the boys getting it on would have thrown a spanner in the works. But I do wholeheartedly that good sex can make a story or break it and I owe my beta many, many drinks for making sure that it wasn't disasterous.
Thanks a million for leaving me such a wonderful comment, hon. I means a lot. And have a wonderful weekend.
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