Hello again! Thank you so much for more awesome feedback!
It’s just that people may not understand what he chooses to censor.
Exactly! If anything, the goofy comments and inappropriately timed humour are part of that: lightening the moment, distraction, subterfuge. It might appear that Dean's inside voice/outside voice filter doesn't always work, but I think that it works so well that people have no idea how much control he has.
It was especially nice at this point in the story, since Dean had only been remembering bad things about John in the first two parts.
I'm glad that that part worked for you. I think that John was in many ways an awful father, but I do think that he loved his boys enormously; the mistakes he made came from personal failings, not a lack of love.
And Sam’s comment about cuddle-raping him once he fell asleep had me laughing.
Yay! That's totally what I was going for. Ooh, happy me.
The dog barking as they made their way to the diner seemed very realistic.
I'm relieved to hear it. Scenes like that are very challenging to write, review and edit with a concern for believability.
Maybe I thought that was extra funny, because I find Jensen so very pretty, and Dean so very toppy.
Hee! I do see how some people might see Dean as toppish, but to me, he is a classic pushy bottom and power bottom. I even see him topping from the bottom and bratting... Although, that last one might just be part of our shared love. Wink wink.
I found Dean’s little flashback about being with the lesbian and the straight girl at the same time to be really believable and hot - which is surprising, because usually that doesn’t do much for me.
I don't even know exactly where that came from; it just sort of popped up. I think that maybe part of it was to explore Dean's past, his experience of sex; I just see him as having done all sorts of things. And I know from real life experience or observation that people often do not conform to a rigid definition of sexuality, even if they identify with that definition in their own mind. Anyway, I just thought that Dean's experience would have gone beyond basics.
I could feel the tension start to build when the two women sit beside the boys and start talking...
Yays! This is where the story's overall climax begins to froth, so I am delighted that you felt the tension rising here. I meant for it to keep building from there, and this is exactly what I'd hoped for: ... That just made me want them to have that conversation even more.
I can understand and empathize with Dean, thinking that he was next in line, and that he was doomed.
I'm really happy to hear this; I was afraid it might not work, for some reason.
... I LOVE that Dean does that. And I loved that the guy he went to meet was exactly what he’d claimed to be...
Me too! Hee! That was actually the very first part of the story I wrote. I don't know why - I already had the basic plot - but it just came more easily. Weird. Anyway, yes: I think that, for me, it was all part of that 'the normal world and the weird world are actually not separate entities' element that, while not essential to this fic, was in the back of my mind the whole time. Dean's past experience with the lesbian was definitely par of that, too.
Hee! I do see how some people might see Dean as toppish, but to me, he is a classic pushy bottom and power bottom. I even see him topping from the bottom and bratting... Although, that last one might just be part of our shared love. Wink wink.
LMAO! Topping from the bottom is the only way to go. ;)
It’s just that people may not understand what he chooses to censor.
Exactly! If anything, the goofy comments and inappropriately timed humour are part of that: lightening the moment, distraction, subterfuge. It might appear that Dean's inside voice/outside voice filter doesn't always work, but I think that it works so well that people have no idea how much control he has.
It was especially nice at this point in the story, since Dean had only been remembering bad things about John in the first two parts.
I'm glad that that part worked for you. I think that John was in many ways an awful father, but I do think that he loved his boys enormously; the mistakes he made came from personal failings, not a lack of love.
And Sam’s comment about cuddle-raping him once he fell asleep had me laughing.
Yay! That's totally what I was going for. Ooh, happy me.
The dog barking as they made their way to the diner seemed very realistic.
I'm relieved to hear it. Scenes like that are very challenging to write, review and edit with a concern for believability.
Maybe I thought that was extra funny, because I find Jensen so very pretty, and Dean so very toppy.
Hee! I do see how some people might see Dean as toppish, but to me, he is a classic pushy bottom and power bottom. I even see him topping from the bottom and bratting... Although, that last one might just be part of our shared love. Wink wink.
I found Dean’s little flashback about being with the lesbian and the straight girl at the same time to be really believable and hot - which is surprising, because usually that doesn’t do much for me.
I don't even know exactly where that came from; it just sort of popped up. I think that maybe part of it was to explore Dean's past, his experience of sex; I just see him as having done all sorts of things. And I know from real life experience or observation that people often do not conform to a rigid definition of sexuality, even if they identify with that definition in their own mind. Anyway, I just thought that Dean's experience would have gone beyond basics.
I could feel the tension start to build when the two women sit beside the boys and start talking...
Yays! This is where the story's overall climax begins to froth, so I am delighted that you felt the tension rising here. I meant for it to keep building from there, and this is exactly what I'd hoped for: ... That just made me want them to have that conversation even more.
I can understand and empathize with Dean, thinking that he was next in line, and that he was doomed.
I'm really happy to hear this; I was afraid it might not work, for some reason.
... I LOVE that Dean does that. And I loved that the guy he went to meet was exactly what he’d claimed to be...
Me too! Hee! That was actually the very first part of the story I wrote. I don't know why - I already had the basic plot - but it just came more easily. Weird. Anyway, yes: I think that, for me, it was all part of that 'the normal world and the weird world are actually not separate entities' element that, while not essential to this fic, was in the back of my mind the whole time. Dean's past experience with the lesbian was definitely par of that, too.
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LMAO! Topping from the bottom is the only way to go. ;)
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