thirty-seven.

[ddabong]

thirty-seven.
four-hundred and ninety-five words.
can't say that things will be alright; can't lie to you.

Her phone is ringing, her phone is ringing, her phone shouldn't be ringing.

"What?" Jessica answers after pulling her phone under the covers, pushing it up against her ear. She thinks that maybe she should have made an effort to hide the

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[y_n_k]

I've been waiting for Jung sisters fic from you <3 I loved one day, you'll be a star, but I was hoping for another one where they interacted in real time.

First off, I absolutely love the relationship portrayed here. You've a great way with showing the differences in relationships between people and making them so *real* I admit that upon my first reading, I cried because it made me think so much about my own sister, the relationship I have with her and also the relationship I don't have with her, compared with how the Jung sisters relate here.

I love how they know each other (Sica knowing something was wrong), I love how they're so similar but so different (so quiet, but Krystal relying on Jessica), I love how they're home for each other (the fact that Krystal called *Jessica,* and just all of Jessica's feelings that you share with us).

I love how much of an unni Jessica is here. Older siblings all have their different ways of being an older sibling, and even though Jessica thinks she's lacking (the last lines and that line "Sometimes, Jessica feels like ... she does matter to someone"), she's such a good sister, not just because she takes the time to take care of Krystal, but because how she loves Krystal and needs her too.

I love how Krystal is "Soojung" here, and how even though they're seemingly so different, they're similar, and it's almost as if their personalities have switched - Jessica being the strong one, Krystal being the one who is reliant (as opposed to "independent").

This is becoming very incoherent isn't it -_-; On the writing itself: I can't say enough about how talented you are in *showing* - that third paragraph, the description of Krystal's voice ("now the tone is more anxious, more apologetic than the first time") says so much without going overboard; you can hear how her voice would change and it also tells so much about Krystal, and her feelings for Jessica, not to mention how Jessica reacts to it. I love how next line, "And technically, nothing has to be wrong..." makes the later line, "... supporting herself (because that's how Krystal is, independent" have even more impact and how it's not exactly a contradiction, how Krystal is acting now, but like ... she's *letting* herself be this way, to the only person who she will allow to see this way ...

That whole paragraph, that begins "Okay" is so beautiful. How Krystal finally breaks down and admits what's wrong, how Jessica's "brand" of being an older sibling is revealed, and just the love in that moment, of two sisters finding comfort in each other. The whole section from that point on is just so emotional... and layered emotion, yet again, because there's bits of regret with the comfort and longing there at the end, and a little bit of something else, like wanting to be a protector as well.

I wish I could point out favorite lines, but there's just so many - all of them are so meaningful and it's so hard to just pick *one* - it's just amazing how much you show of Jessica but in a way that's so characteristic of her - matter-of-fact, but so honest that it's almost heartbreaking...

Tangent: I love how these latest three tie together a little. I'll go into how I think 36 links to 35 when I comment on that one, but 37 seems to link to 36 with the description of how Krystal says Jessica's name, "the way Jessica likes to hear it, with the right accent and the right pace" which links to the line in 36 (which I love just as much), "Tiffany's voice is soft, is low, is husky, and is a change of pace" (not to mention how Tiffany used a diminutive of Jessica's name). Even if the linking wasn't deliberate, it's still wonderful craftmanship.

Sooooooo many apologies about how fail this comment is. I can't write coherently when I'm so emotional moved by something ;___________; (and I'm not even going to proofread O_O hitting post now~)