158 words and nothing. but. bs.

[day_and_a_half]

*takes a deep breath*
Yes, I knowI'mnotsupposedtowriteconfuzingstufflikethatbutmumtoldmeto.
I don't even know where this came from, but here... 158 words mini-ficlet focused on James Wilson. It's crappy, and AU, if you speak that.

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Review & other comments

[geelady]

I'd say you have a great visual eye; that's mostly all that writing is - the ability to paint a portait in a stranger's mind.
I also think that here Wilson is perfectly in character.
I have no idea your age or writing experience, but this was smokey, visually & emotionally impacting. Yet it ended on a surprisingly effective tender note.
I hope to read more of your work.
BTW, a personal opinion from someone who's been there (and to some extent, still is), depression may be an illness, but it's not a flaw. I have come to recognize that my "dark side" lends itself to my writing in a way I doubt I could achieve if I did not have that dark side.
(Been on Wellbutrin for two years, I'm better but not "fixed". I have come to agree with House - don't want to be "fixed" anymore. Being less unsteady serves me well enough).
Besides, House is correct - normal is boring.
I'd say, as a writer, you're a natural.

Re: Review & other comments

[day_and_a_half]

Wow, thank you. I never really think about what I write, I just start typing. That's why I'm not able to write anything that's longer than 500 words :) I get lost in my own ideas too quickly.

I have come to recognize that my "dark side" lends itself to my writing in a way I doubt I could achieve if I did not have that dark side.

Same here. In some ways, writing dark or emotionally upsetting pieces is easier for me than writing something that's on the happier side of life. Which also means I have huge problems with the latter ;) I try, though.

Usually, I don't post much on here, simply because I doubt anyone is interested in what I have to share. But, if you're willing to read more, I'm willing to post more.

(I'd also like you to point out any grammar and spelling errors, because I'm German, 18, and far from perfect.)

Again, thanks. <3

Re: Review & other comments

[geelady]

Yes, I'll read more now and then for sure.
If there is another place you post more often, I could go there and read (if it's allowed that is).

Your Enlgish is better than my German, ;^) and better than some English speaking (and writing) folks I know.