AMC--Chapter Fifteen

[dawn_felagund]

Well, it's that special day of the week...posting Friday!

I'm going to keep it short for once: We're still in Tyelkormo's point of view. We're still in Formenos.

Warnings for the chapter: Nelyo!gropage. Again. The boy can't keep his hands to himself. Also, Tyelko mentions "spawning." Yes, really, if you thought I was kidding in the Ask My

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First!

[aramel_calawen]

I'm first! Whee!

Ahem... now I'll go read it. :)

Re: First!

[dawn_felagund]

LOL! Wow, I think you may have even topped Arandil's record with that one! :D

Enjoy!

Re: First!

[aramel_calawen]

Teehee...

I loved the duet! Maglor pretending to be a girl... that's precious!

I was thinking of my own Silm fic, a take on the story of Feanor's sons by an OFC. I was nervous about her being a Mary-Sue, and nervous about going too far in trying not to make her a Sue, and... well. There will be an OFC/Maedhros romance (sorry, canatics!) though nothing will come of it. And now I'm even more nervous, because I'm not sure if it will be as good as AMC (read: I don't think it'll hold a candle). I have short attention span, so most of my long fiction is just... weird. And I'm still wondering about humourous dialogue, and trying for a G rating (pretty hard when all three Kinslayings are covered)... and, well.

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[dawn_felagund]

Whew. One person not going to kill me for the awfulness of the song! ;)

I experienced much of the same Sue/un-Sue dilemma with Annawende. It seems to be a common problem with OFCs! ;) I think that we read so many bad characterizations of OFCs and see so much hype drawn up around the "Mary Sue" that we naturally get on edge when expected to write a young OFC as a love interest of a (hott!) canon character. juno_magic and I had a great discussion on Mary Sues in fanfic. (You might have read it, though; it was part of Chapter Seven. Anyway.)

Characters are always a big deal--one could say the biggest deal--to me. I don't claim to be perfect at it yet (no one is!), but I have generally found that good characters are a mix of good and bad, just like real people. "Mary Sue" is really just a word for an OFC who is too perfect. I would say that if you give your OFC enough flaws and enough realistic behaviors, then you will be fine and will probably have a character that people will enjoy reading about!

As for comparing with AMC, I think that

AMC - Chapter Fifteen

[digdigil]

The arms of a crafstman, not a prince Oh, my! *heart flutters*

What if it was I who saw him first? HeHeHe! *dreams*

Crappy Criticism: I believe "You sons" should be "Your sons".

Carnistir and the little girl are too funny!

Ha! Ha! Nerdanel's rules for courting: no removal of clothing, careful with placement of hands: "If you wouldn't touch me in such a manner, then it is not proper that you should likewise touch her".

ROFLMAO! And then, "It is doubtful that Nelyo would caress Nana's breast the way he does Annawendë's!" ROFL!! That Tyelkormo is such a witty little Elf!

Ada..smelled..like soil that had been turned in the spring.." LOL!

I love the song! It is wonderfully joyous and completely hilarious!

Another great chapter, Dawn!

Re: AMC - Chapter Fifteen

[dawn_felagund]

Y'all are giving me a false sense of security....

Two people now who aren't going to skewer my attempt at a "song." ;D

Thanks for the "crappy criticism." I spend so much time with these stories that I start to memorize the lines and so gloss them when reading to edit. That's (one of) the reasons I love you all! This story is going to be so much better because of everyone's efforts.

::big sweeping Thank You! :D ::

Re: AMC - Chapter Fifteen

[aramel_calawen]

Heh. I think the reason people aren't killing you because of the song is because Maglor's drunk.

If he'd done something like that while sober... well.

Re: AMC - Chapter Fifteen

[dawn_felagund]

*I* was most definitely sober when I wrote it (as this was the stage in the story where every single bit was written at work.)

But I guess you don't hold me to as high of standards as Maglor.

And I must admit to being *really* glad about that! ;D

[kaikias]

We wouldn't happen to have seen mini-Mrs. Caranthir crawling onto Maglor's lap and chasing after her future husband in this chapter, would we?

[dawn_felagund]

*ding ding ding*

We have a winner!

I had wondered if anyone even remembered that "contest" anymore. I should have imagined that the Caranthir-fan would ;)

Yes, she is Caranthir's future wife.

(What was the prize for winning? I forget.... :-/ )

[kaikias]

Well, it was just so obvious; I'd been thinking she'd be hidden in the background somewhere.

Dinner with one of your elves, I think, but it doesn't much matter. *cuddles your Caranthir* *and your Celegorm* *reaches over and cuddles your Fingolfin, too, what the hell*

[dawn_felagund]

Eh, you can have them all :)

I'm trying to finish a chapter with Maitimo this weekend, so as long as you leave him for my harrassment torment consultation, then I am happy.

[tarion_anarore]

Oh drunk!Maitimo & Makalaure is just priceless! ROTFLMAO!!!!!

And Carnistir running and screaming from that girl is hilarious!!

This chapter is just too funny! I'm sure I'm getting strange looks from my hallmates!

[dawn_felagund]

Thanks :) I'm glad people seem to find it funny instead of saying, "Wow, that was an unbelievably stupid chapter."

I'm sure I'm getting strange looks from my hallmates!

Just imagine the looks I got while writing it! ;D

[tarion_anarore]

Just imagine the looks I got while writing it! ;D

Hmm, true!

My hallmate came in and asked what I was doing. I said "reading people's live journals." And she's like "Uhhh..." and pretends to start leaving. And I say "What are you doing?" and she says "I'm going to do some work." And I say "Work?! And you make fun of me!?" I was amused.

[dawn_felagund]

I love it when geeks make fun of other geeks for being geeky....

I have had friends make fun of another group that plays the Exalted RPG *religiously* every Saturday night.

Then, ten minutes later, I check back on their conversation, and they're saying, "And then I got this special character, and he was weapon skill 5 and toughness 8 and he had 14 wounds and...."

And I say, "Listen to yourselves, people!!"

I have learned never to make fun of geekiness. Chances are, before the day is done, I will be acting twice as geeky.

[fanged_geranium]

Very amusing, and the song is in the best Elvish tradition, along with 'O! tra-la-la-lally here down in the valley!' etc.

[dawn_felagund]

LOL! Yes, my musical indiscretions are at least defensible in canon! Elves have been known to both act stupidly when drunk and pen bad lyrics.

[fanged_geranium]

I think I'd like LoTR better if there were more silly songs in it, instead of the Beren and Luthien song with eight verses just to get them to meet, and then the final verse saying they died. They livened up 'The Hobbit' so well!

[dawn_felagund]

I agree wholly! Song seems such an important part of all of Tolkien's cultures, and it is easy to believe that they used them in celebration. (Hence the fact that I occasionally give in to the whim to write bad poetry for my Elves to sing!)