Thank you! I never thought I'd put this story out for anyone to read, and so it has been a nerve-wracking experience. Thanks so much for your comments and support! :)
Thanks! I'm glad that last line worked for you. Sometimes, I have this fear that I'm being too melodramatic, but I have the excuse that I'm trying to do something specific with Tyelkormo's character--who is a little melodramatic himself--and so it is permitted.... :)
Thank you, though it's not particularly mine, as I got it off proverb's icon site. (Also, ficwise, a linguistic nit: "Ada" and "Nana" are Sindarin terms. A Quenya speaker like our wee Celegorm here would more likely call his parents "Atto" and "Amme".)
Thanks! Another linguistic nitpicker pointed it out to me too, and I will change it, as soon as I have the time (and strength) to brave the Microsoft Word "find and replace" function for so long....
No, Juno, I meant it when I said, "nitpick away!" This is a long story, and my eyes have been looking at this chapter for almost a year now. Frankly, I am at my wits end with it, to batter an already battered cliche further, and I hope everyone with ideas for improvement is as honest.
I am glad you noticed the tense problems. The "Tyelkormo" section was originally written in past tense. The next section--the "Carnistir" section--somehow ended up a mixture of both. My pride as an editor suffered a bit to know that I didn't even notice it in my own writing. Every chapter after was in present tense. So that left me with the decision to change 20-some pages of past into present, or 250-some pages of present into past. I suppose you know what I chose
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AMC: Chapter ThreedigdigilJuly 26 2005, 15:12:58 UTC
Lovely, lovely descriptions. I love to read descriptions of food in stories, and I always forget to do it in mine. It really works in making the situations and the people real.
The interaction between the brothers is reminiscent of the hobbits - this is brilliant! It makes the reader love them even more. It is especially endearing because we know what will happen to them later. It heightens the pathos.
Re: AMC: Chapter Threedawn_felagundJuly 26 2005, 15:55:18 UTC
My point in writing this story (and sorry if you have read this elsewhere and so I am repeating myself!) was to "humanize" the Feanorians. I do not believe that any of them were evil, although their deeds were evil. I even find them justified in some--certainly not all!--of their beliefs and actions.
My #1 Fanfic Annoyance is Feanorian stories that portray them as being evil from the beginning, especially stories that imply that Feanor was in some way an abusive husband and father. The love that his sons had for him must have been extraordinary to make them leave their homes--in some cases, their wives--and damn themselves in his name.
Second to this is the 3 C's--Celegorm, Caranthir, and Curufin--who some writers like to portray as inherently wicked, as though the fact that the first was a favorite of a Vala and the other two married non-evil women, and the last even produced a very non-evil, albeit misguided, son. (Or so we can assume about their wives. I think Tolkien would have mentioned if Caranthir's wife had doings in all
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Re: AMC: Chapter ThreedigdigilJuly 27 2005, 13:34:42 UTC
You are absolutely correct in your representation of Feanor and his sons as real people and not evil at all from the beginning. This is why I think someone has to write about them, using what little information Tolkien gave us, creating stories that are rich in details of their personalities and characters, showing their family lives, etc., just as you are doing with this story! I always thought that all of the stories from The Silmarillion would make great novels on their own, and then great movies, if fleshed out, each on their own. Feanor's story, is of course, the most intensely interesting one. Oh, btw, just because I wrote him as evil in my story, I think I wrote him with a lot of depth, and he was written as evil only to serve the story purposes. I started it so long ago, and it was before I realized that I really loved this character. My stories don't matter to me much once they're done. I'm not really attached to them in that way. Basically, I feel I'm just experimenting with different styles, etc., until I can find
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Re: AMC: Chapter Threedawn_felagundJuly 27 2005, 14:08:44 UTC
I always tease my husband that if a Silmarillion movie was ever made, then I would be first in line to see it, hate it, and decry it every after, then be the first in line to buy it on DVD! When I first got into the Tolkien community, I thought that the LotR purists who nitpicked every change that PJ made to the original had sticks up their butts and needed to chill out and enjoy the movies for what they were. Then, I had the slow realization that, were the Sil ever to make it to the big screen (haha), then I would be the same way! And some Tolkien newbie would be telling *me* to chill out and enjoy the movie
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I don't think I've commented before because I think I've been reading this at HASA...but anyways, nice job!!
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And I love your LJ icon. It makes me smile :)
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I am glad you noticed the tense problems. The "Tyelkormo" section was originally written in past tense. The next section--the "Carnistir" section--somehow ended up a mixture of both. My pride as an editor suffered a bit to know that I didn't even notice it in my own writing. Every chapter after was in present tense. So that left me with the decision to change 20-some pages of past into present, or 250-some pages of present into past. I suppose you know what I chose ( ... )
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The interaction between the brothers is reminiscent of the hobbits - this is brilliant! It makes the reader love them even more. It is especially endearing because we know what will happen to them later. It heightens the pathos.
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My #1 Fanfic Annoyance is Feanorian stories that portray them as being evil from the beginning, especially stories that imply that Feanor was in some way an abusive husband and father. The love that his sons had for him must have been extraordinary to make them leave their homes--in some cases, their wives--and damn themselves in his name.
Second to this is the 3 C's--Celegorm, Caranthir, and Curufin--who some writers like to portray as inherently wicked, as though the fact that the first was a favorite of a Vala and the other two married non-evil women, and the last even produced a very non-evil, albeit misguided, son. (Or so we can assume about their wives. I think Tolkien would have mentioned if Caranthir's wife had doings in all ( ... )
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