AMC--Chapter Fifty-One

[dawn_felagund]

I have decided to divide the last part of AMC into two posts. It is simply too long for a single posting, and I wish also to tinker a bit with next week's chapter, as there is a rather important event that deserves more attention than I--in the rush of finishing a 350K-word novel--was willing to give it at first

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[atanwende]

Oh, Dawn. This is beautiful in so many ways. I think it's one of the best chapters you've written for AMC. Not that the others weren't good, but in my opinion there were simpy some who stood out, and this one is definitely among them! :)

The beginning is wonderful. It fits so well with the weather we have today; a fine warm spring day at last, and after all those cold weaks one cannot imagine that it will get even warmer yet. I love Feanor jumping into the fountain. And I love it when Vorondil finally joins them. In fact, I had to laugh out loud.

Squeezing his fingers, gently, so not to wake him, I whisper, “May you never remember it.”

Phrases like that almost kill me everytime I read them. Just like Nelyo thinking about the children he and Macalaure will have. *sobs*

I think Carnistir "Invisible" custome is priceless. Hehe. ;)

Nelyo wear nothing under his custome? O.o *must not have naughty thoughts*

When Rúmil appears the whole atmosphere of the chapter seems to change. One moment I was sitting here happily eating a delicious Turkish Lahmacun, the next I felt (at least!) as apprehensive as Nelyo. That was wonderfully done. It really pulled me as a reader "inside" the story.

I really liked Carnistir's reaction to Rúmil. This seems like exactly the thing he would do.

But that last paragraph hurt almost physically. Ouch. Poor Rúmil. *sobs some more*

[dawn_felagund]

It's one of my favorite chapters too. :) The funny thing is that this whole section was written about last September, and yet--come April--I didn't remember it very well. So it was quite a surprise to read it and discover that it was actually pretty good. A fitting conclusion to this first story in the epic, I hope. :)

I think Carnistir "Invisible" custome is priceless. Hehe. ;)

Credit for that actually goes to my sister! She dressed up as Invisible one year for Halloween: She wore all black, painted all exposed skin black, and put on a pair of black sunglasses. It was really creepy!

Nelyo wear nothing under his custome? O.o *must not have naughty thoughts*

Oh, but why? I had plenty of them while I was writing it. >;^D

When Rúmil appears the whole atmosphere of the chapter seems to change.

I was going to say "Yay!" but then I thought it might be perceived as rude that I was glad that you were feeling such apprehension. ;)

Of course, you're a writer too...you know how it goes...so "Yay!" :^D

I really liked Carnistir's reaction to Rúmil. This seems like exactly the thing he would do.

I love those two. *pets them and pets your Carni icon while at it*

Just so you know, after I typed that, I stared at your Carni icon for a solid minute. And I think I drooled a little. ;)

Thank you so very much for your kind words! This truly made my morning! :)

[atanwende]

Credit for that actually goes to my sister! She dressed up as Invisible one year for Halloween

That's a cool idea. I have to admit I'm shockingly uncreative when it comes to Halloween parties; I usually come dressed all in black and use even more eyeliner than normally. :-P

Oh, but why? I had plenty of them while I was writing it. >;^D

Well then... *has naughty thoughts* ;)

Just so you know, after I typed that, I stared at your Carni icon for a solid minute. And I think I drooled a little. ;)

Hehe. Just don't tell the Noldo. He will be unbearable. ;-P

Thank you so very much for your kind words! This truly made my morning! :)

You're more than welcome. I've enjoyed this chapter immensely. :)

[tarion_anarore]

Just don't tell the Noldo. He will be unbearable. ;-P

Wait, he always is! ;)

[atanwende]

Wait, he always is! ;)

Oh well, I guess you're right. ;)