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fancyann1974 May 14 2010, 12:46:35 UTC
aahhh poor jun ...cant wait to see how this all works out...thank you for the great story and update
:)

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darkilk May 15 2010, 02:00:12 UTC
LOL. It seems like whatever the case, it isn't going to work itself out that easily yet. Trust the hime-sama to put himself in a position to suffer more angst. LOL.

Thanks for commenting. :)

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iupdarlin May 14 2010, 13:24:55 UTC
Awww, poor Jun, I just want to hug him &hearts But he would rather have a hug from Sho :3

The wait was worth it, by the way!! I'll wait as long as it takes for the next part &hearts

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darkilk May 15 2010, 02:03:44 UTC
Right now, I think he'd just be satisfied if he can just receive a clear message from our resident rapper. So far, it's just mixed signals all over the place. Angst much? LOL. Aren't I mean to the one who baited me to the group in the first place?

Thank you for being so patient. Now, to worry about the next part which is scattered all over. Argh! :)

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hiro_chan May 14 2010, 14:52:17 UTC
aaawwww jun.

i like the way you incorporated the RL events into this, especially using Maki-chan as the issue that made jun snap.

sho being so clueless, i don't know whether to feel exasperated at him, or feel bad for him.

needless to say - more :D!

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darkilk May 15 2010, 02:11:15 UTC
Am trying to incorporate a few more RL events according to sequence for the next few parts, and they seem to be arranging themselves in order, so let's see how that turns out.

Thanks for greenlighting mentions of Maki. Wasn't initially sure if it would work out, but the fits seems okay.

As for Sho, well, let's just say there's a reason for his "cluelessness". LOL.

Love your comments, and definitely working on more. RL is sweet as well, what with the sakumoto moments that trigger my writing juices. :)

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vampyre13nyx May 14 2010, 15:11:59 UTC
*sniff* awww jun-pon....
thanks for the update and the awesome story~

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darkilk May 15 2010, 02:14:46 UTC
I don't think you'll be that pleased with me when you see the speed with which you see me updating. RL intrudes into the precious time I'd want to reserve for creative writing. Argh.

Thanks for the comments. :)

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astrangerenters May 14 2010, 19:56:54 UTC
Even when the two of them try to talk nothing really gets resolved! Very interested to see if anything happens here with Maki, and if Sho's even going to get a clue any time soon!

This is just a stylistic preference on my part, but don't be afraid to just use their names. I honestly didn't know who 'dark-haired man child' was and just guessed you meant Nino?

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darkilk May 15 2010, 02:23:23 UTC
Really, you'd have thought once they actually to talk face to face, the misunderstandings would be cleared up, and then this happens. LOL.

As for Sho getting a clue, let's just say our Keio-boy still has that certain amount of *innocence* that just makes my heart go "Oh, Sho..."

Oh no! You outted me. Guiltily, I'll admit that the omission was intentional. As if two in the mix isn't enough in this angst-fest, now I'm dragging in another member, but OTP of course demands it's more BFF-nature involvement. LOL... Is it really Nino? LOL *silly alien LOLs wickedly and dashes off before Jaime bricks her*

Thanks always for your franks and constructive comments. Hearts to you! :) :) :)

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astrangerenters May 15 2010, 16:38:15 UTC
No, I was genuinely confused, LOL. I am not a fan of epithets at all, hahaha. I find it jarring. I wouldn't call Sho 'the rapper' unless he is actually rapping at the time. I'd just say 'Sho' :)

Think of it this way. If I was writing a story where I was the main character, would I be writing "the librarian" in place of Jamie if the story had nothing to do with me shelving books and/or answering reference queries? Hee! But again, that's how I prefer to write. I'm just being honest.

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darkilk May 16 2010, 02:13:34 UTC
Oh wow. I never thought of it like that; was worrying if it'd be boring just simply repeating the names over n over - not that anyone would gets sick of THEIR names. LOL. I guess it really does make sense in a way. Definitely keep that in mind for future writing. <3 <3 again for your generous feedback. :) :)

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