*dies*
Okay, sent back the wave of comments and reviews (I'm so glad I'm not in big fandoms because I just would not be able to handle any more reviews than what I'm getting now! X____X) so it's time for the read-through fo Searching! @____@
I was going to take Pai out in the second part but... She appears in the first part, and then doesn't appear again until the epilogue? =/ Hmmmm~ So she stays. And I'll be changing Marland's 'only shrugs with wings' to 'shrugs with whatever appendage he feels like'. Except when his shoulder is injured. XD
I'll be taking note of anything that I should change in this post.
Aaaaand *dives back in*
...So, in saying that I'm just going to read and not edit...I edit. XD; Because I know I'll miss those mistakes when I get around to fixing them. XD;;
I never did outright state that Marland looked like a lizard or dragon, huh?
Oh jeez, Shodin sitting around in wet clothing, talking. XD;
Make it more noticeable when Shodin sits up?
I do need to have a conversation later where Marland thinks that Shodin's language comes from Puzz. (Except Puzz doesn't talk like him. Uuuuh...)
(I...have already apparently added another thousand words? What? O____o)
I was going to take Pai out in the second part but... She appears in the first part, and then doesn't appear again until the epilogue? =/ Hmmmm~ So she stays. And I'll be changing Marland's 'only shrugs with wings' to 'shrugs with whatever appendage he feels like'. Except when his shoulder is injured. XD
I'll be taking note of anything that I should change in this post.
Aaaaand *dives back in*
...So, in saying that I'm just going to read and not edit...I edit. XD; Because I know I'll miss those mistakes when I get around to fixing them. XD;;
I never did outright state that Marland looked like a lizard or dragon, huh?
Oh jeez, Shodin sitting around in wet clothing, talking. XD;
Make it more noticeable when Shodin sits up?
I do need to have a conversation later where Marland thinks that Shodin's language comes from Puzz. (Except Puzz doesn't talk like him. Uuuuh...)
(I...have already apparently added another thousand words? What? O____o)