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Forgive Me [No.6; Nezion]

Aug 11, 2011 01:38

Title: Forgive Me
Series: No. 6
Pairings: Nezumi/Shion
Rating: PG
Length: 500 words; oneshot

( Nezumi used to wonder what it would take to break Shion. )

fandom: no. 6, character: shion, pairing: nezumi/shion, character: nezumi

Comments 7

rurin August 11 2011, 07:35:47 UTC

Oh... oh. You totally caught me off-guard with the last paragraph. -sobs-

I loved how you used the quotes! Even more regarding the fact that things like focus on your own survival and footsteps making no sound as he walks leaves some kind of bitter scent as soon as the reader understands.

darkfireburning August 13 2011, 05:59:56 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked the little bits of foreshadowing :3

/hands tissues

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darkfireburning August 13 2011, 06:06:21 UTC

HERE, HAVE SOME DUCT TAPE. DUCT TAPE FIXES EVERYTHING =D

Thank you! <3

chalkpowder August 12 2011, 02:56:58 UTC

ahnsdnfm the end hit me so hard ;__; it made me shiver.

darkfireburning August 13 2011, 06:07:48 UTC

Haha, I'm flattered it got such a response! Thank you <3

kyogres August 12 2011, 03:53:43 UTC

Wow, I did not see that last line coming at all. Kudos to you.

I really wish LJ had a +fav feature...

darkfireburning August 13 2011, 06:08:28 UTC

Thank you! <3

Yeah, that would be nice - hopefully someday?