Porn--It's What's For Dinner

[darkblysse]

Title: Porn--It's What's For Dinner
Rating: NC-17
Type: Yaoi, PWP
Pairing: Elricest
Warnings: Elricest, smut, food play

Summary: Ed gets his five servings of fruit.

A/N: Non-pr0n fic was giving me troubles... XD; Wrote this to get over that little slump. <3 And thanks to  blackspandex for the title... sort of. XD She kinda blurted that out at me one day, and

Comments

[blackspandex]

Yanno
I may sound repetitive sometimes, but I'm serious when I say this to those I say it to.

With EVERY thing you do in a project one after the other, you gain knowledge and skill through each one. This is true of this story as well, and I hope you should be very proud of it :3.
I really like the way you mentioned how a moan 'poured out'. It's a very visual as well as aural, and we all know pouring of any kind starts at a little bit and then gains volume no matter what the first bit of pour started with. Therefore our mind calculate it into a sound. Well mine did lol.

But its little things like this, and the characteristics (Example: Edward hucking his stuff about, and then asking for dinner ROFL) of the boys that really make a story - a story. No matter the content or context.

Well done, Blysse, I can't wait to see the next thing.

(PS
I'm like totally stoked you used that title, xD I squealed IRL ROFL)

[darkblysse]

It's a very visual as well as aural, and we all know pouring of any kind starts at a little bit and then gains volume no matter what the first bit of pour started with.

That's actually how I heard it in my mind as I wrote it. ^^; The noise getting louder and all. XD

And I really love throwing in those little bits of personality to my fics. Honestly, it's just damned fun to do, have Ed barging in like that wanting food and then--WABAM, naked Al. XD

Also, it's things like you pointing these bits out that's helping me to improve quickly, too! XD I keep these little helpful snippets stashed away in my brain for later use, y'know. XP

[azure15]

Oh my *fans self* I love the imagery you use for this, it's just so gorgeous, and easy to let the scene play out in your mind.

Oh and I love the ending. That's really typical Ed, right there! ♥

[darkblysse]

Thanks so much, dear! ^//^;;

And I had to end it with a little bit of Ed's lovely personality coming out like that. XDD It's too much fun not to!

[jasmineflame]

Sounds oh so very messy in oh so many ways XD

[darkblysse]

Oho, it was. ^_~

[sirkrunk741]

HOO buddy. That's... wow. I just had lunch, and it makes me hungry.

[darkblysse]

I was fucking starving after I wrote it. XD

And not just for food, either. >//>

[sirkrunk741]

XDDDDDDDDD

[alanna214]

Dammit. I want strawberries and whipped cream now. >_< Of coure, it wouldn't be enough anyway, cuz I can't really have Ed or Al. :p Thanks for another great fic. :D

[darkblysse]

I know... so much tastier and more satisfying when it's on top of one of the boys, ne? ^_~