fic: who i was, from the start

[darkaslay]

Yuri turned for the umpteenth time that night, trying to find a good position but each one made her uncomfortable. Her eyes opened to the darkened room to look at the ceiling. According to her alarm clock it was five in the morning and usually, she was dead asleep but there were too many things on her mind.

Grabbing her clothes, she got dressed

Comments

[anonymous]

first of all, i just found this story and i have to say that you're an amazing writer, just the way you cleverly describe details makes your writing that much more fun to read (not to mention a great storyline and real characters and story continuity, okay im rambling now but you get the point)

but i really just wanted to comment on this last (couple) chapter(s) where we finally see Fany's humanity. it's kind of bittersweet to see it because Fany's invincible [s]sex[/s] appeal is now countered by a girl who really shows loss and a longing for more than meets the surface. The Fany who could make Yuri melt with a simple word/touch and Yoona squirm with her confident walk was really appealing and a HOT and fun character to throw into the mix each time she made an appearance, so it's sad to see those barriers be broken down. Yet it's also nice to see Fany's vulnerability and obviously it needs to be done to build her relationship with Jessica [s]zomg more jeti please[/s] make it happen i trust you!

so i realized i wrote a paragraph but i hope you don't mind. oh, and another thing i like about your writing (style? discipline?) is that you say when you're gonna post the next update and from what i can tell, you have stuck to them which is super. looking forward to the next update.

[darkaslay]

As much as I would have loved to continue to write Tiffany as a sex goddess, I needed to give her more depth which you see when she breaks up with Yuri and her interactions with Jessica. I'm glad her vulnerability isn't turning you off from her because she is still human, with feelings, despite the fact she rarely shows it lol.

You gotta give JeTi some time. They're still feeling each other out ;]