Higher Ground

[dark_adrenalynn]

Title: Higher Ground
Fandom: Harry Potter
Pairings: Dorcas Meadowes/Regulus Black
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Character death, angst
Notes: Sequel to Hand of Glory, this time from Reg's perspective. Thanks to hecticity for her unhelpfulness and enabling and sapphire_jazz for helping me with Regulus.
Summary: Betrayal is like a game of dominoes.

Comments

[willfully]

I like it, but to be completely honest, it's slightly confusing. I don't get what the original "higher ground" quote means in that context. And it was obvious to me who the Inferi was, because I know she's blonde, but the stump thing confused me for a bit despite the title of your last fic.

However. I love the idea behind this: how Dorcas' betrayal of the Death Eaters and death pushed both Peter and Regulus along their paths, in different ways. I got a sense of the domino or butterfly effect, which came across really nicely. And other than the minor confusion, it's written really well, too. :)

Also, you're very welcome for the unhelpfulness. I'm happy to be unhelpful again soon. XP

[dark_adrenalynn]

It meant she didn't sink to Walburga's level or get snarky with her, she just...kept going as she was--or thats what I was trying for. They cut off her hand, twin, in both fics.

Thank you! :D

[willfully]

I FAIL AT READING, OK. YOU HAVE TO MAKE THINGS INCREDIBLY OBVS FOR ME TO GET IT.

>.>

[dark_adrenalynn]

It was late, you have an excuse. *pat*

[lylianf]

More than loves!

A few typo's to look out for: "unfortunately he ws used to" and "He was tired o shouldering"

I'm sorry, I'm terrible at those things. Pet peeve. But this story, I didn't find confusing at all. I understand the betrayal of all three parties in your story. I loved how Reg didn't really know he loved her. But the question is, did he really take the higher ground? He admitted his love for her, so wouldn't that mean he sunk lower because Doras said to take the higher ground and not really love her? She was subtle. I'm questioning, but maybe this is how you wanted it to be.

Oh Dorcas, her reasoning was spectacular. It was just WHOA, you know? Everyone is a betrayer to some extent or another and all for love. Ironic that they all die.

Your characterization of Regulus was couragous. He was so much more in dephth. He became alive.

Oh yes, I'm rambling here, but it's so true. I'd be more than happy to read your others! I'll be around, stalking your page. Great job!

[lylianf]

P.S. I can hardly wait for Dorcas' point of view!

[dark_adrenalynn]

I don't constantly have a beta, unfortunately, and if my spellcheck and my eyes don't catch it, I miss it. I'd use the excuse that it's not my first language, but I've been using it since I was ickle and going to school here so that would be a cop-out. However, thank you for pointing these out. I used to be an English major, it's a peeve of mine too.

The thing I love about these stories is that it's all so layered and there are so many perspectives, really. He thinks he takes the higher ground, but that is up to the reader whether he really did or not.

It's sad, because really, Dorcas and Reg and so many others never really had a chance for romance, because they die too early--and before they even realise it. Even if The pushy mum of doom (tm) everyone else realised it. War does that, rips people apart and kills them too young.

I really have to give credit for Reg's characterisation to who plays him over at lumos_founders which is part of the lumos_sorting comms. I just borrowed him :D

[dark_adrenalynn]

sapphire_jazz** I really can spell, I swear.