Vala/Daniel/Cam Fanfic

Dec 06, 2006 10:41

AuthorDianaspr aka Irisazul
Title Cant think of one
Pairing VALA/Daniel and some VALA/CAM
RatingG
Warning/Spoilers just one

Vala found herself in front of Mitchell’s office; as she paced back and forth making angry gestures with her hands and talking to herself.
Mitchell’s head poked out of the room.“What!!!” he almost yelled as Vala jumped. ( Read more... )

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janedavitt December 7 2006, 12:51:28 UTC
As with your first chapter, this really needs a beta to sort out the many typos/grammatical errors, and a title, especially on a fic with more than one part, is very handy.

And you say in the header that there is a spoiler but don't give any details?

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I know dianaspr December 7 2006, 14:45:21 UTC
Im jus getting the hang of this, and guess what I had this beta by some body. Ill work on it till I get it right. Thanks for the info. Im grateful somebody takes the time to help me w/ it.

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sweetiemissy December 8 2006, 04:13:46 UTC
I think for someone that English isn't their first language its pretty good. Writing in English takes time to get properly, and as the beta, you dont want to change it completely just the spelling, and gramatical errors to help the person develop it better.

And if I missed something, then thats my fault, I'm in the process of studying for my finals.

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janedavitt December 8 2006, 04:37:46 UTC
I'm sorry; I didn't mean to be negative and I actually beta'd the first chapter for the author after she posted it, so I've put my money where my mouth is and tried to help.

But it's just... ack, can't think of a tactful way of saying this. There's a lot that needs fixing; very basic stuff. And, yes, God, it's amazing for someone for whom English is a second language; no way I could write anything in a foreign language myself and I applaud that, but when a story is written it has to be judged on its own merits and it's up to the author and the beta to make it readable.

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