The day that changed my life [1/?] [RukixReita AoixUruha]firstfanfict

[daisukirain]

This was the day that all my sorrow and pain disappeared it was the day when my heart pounded so hard I thought I was gonna die.

It made my troubles the last thing I would think about. It was the day that I met the man of my dreams, Reita, but his real name is

Akira. This was all that Ruki kept on thinking about in his mind day after day, all that

Comments

[ame_ko]

I thought I would leave a comment before I went to bed. =3

I thought it was really cute, actually. Although I did feel that everything was kind of rushed. I also found it a little hard to follow with everything because of how things were spaced out and placed. I wasn't exactly for sure where things started and ended. You're the writer so you write things as you see fit to write them. ( ^-^)
Also, it might help to come up with a synopsis that way we can get an idea of what the story is about. What's going to go on in this story? How am I suppose to know what the theme of this story is? (O_O)
Kehe, I think it would help a lot. That way, we as the readers can know what is going to take place and how things are going to develop. =3
Oh! At the beginning of the story I was a little confused. It started out as first person then went on into third person once there was a flashback. Since the whole story wasn't in just one person's perspective, I would suggest the parts that are be in quotations. =3
Maybe I'm just being picky. DX

I'd like to see how this goes, though.

By the way, really nice title for the story. I suck at coming up with titles for anything. ( T^T)

You're wanting double spaced lines? Well, what I usually do is I type my written work into some sort of correcting format which already comes with that sort of thing. Then I copy and paste into LJ. =3

If you don't want to do that, I'm not sure how to do it on LJ (if there is a way). You could always double space after every line if you wanted. XD

[daisukirain]

Thank you for reading it and I'm REALLY REALLY glad for you to make suggestions because I am new to all this writing type of thing and I do feel that everything went so fast and stuff and umm you know when you said to write a synopsis what is that actually?????? well if you could tell me what if it is I'll be more than glad and maybe you can help me out with some of the stuff [if you want] because i dont really know what i should do well thanks for your help alot!!!!!!! please write back. bye -Yuki

[ame_ko]

A synopsis is the same thing as a summary, just a more fancy word for it. ^^

I wouldn't mind helping you at all. ^^
Just tell me whatever you need help with and I will do my best to be of help.

[daisukirain]

o cool so synopsis means summary so where should I put the summary?? oh yeah do you mean like i should put the synopsis in the beginning of the story or like in the link area where you click on it so people have a idea of what they want to read ohh yeah when people post a fanfict how do they put all of the stuff up like pairing, summary, warnings, and stuff like that well thats what i wanted you to help me on because its hard cause skool started and its so irritating not being able to get on the computer all the time well thanx if you could help me with that. >u

[ame_ko]

I think it would be better to before the story. =3
How people write the title, chapters, pairings, etc.
You just type all that up yourself. =3
Like:
Title: ....
Chapters: 1/??
Genre: G
and so on. ^^

Ah school started for you? I understand that. ^^
I'm in the process of getting a new computer so it's hard for me to come on all the time too.

[daisukirain]

thanx for the information and hopefully you can come on sometimes too I have to sneak on *sneaky* its funny i'll try to finish my next one much better