Patchwork Heart (Part 2)

[cypanache]

Title: Patchwork Heart
Pairing: Leslie/Ben (AU)
Word Count: ~5,100 (this part)
Rating: R? (Let's say R, there is a huge amount of swearing in this, and also sexual imagery)
Timeline: Highschool Alt!Universe (yeah you read that right)
Warnings: Um, they're recently acquired step-siblings, so you know that could be a little squicky (idek)

A/N:  Yeah okay

Comments

Made my morning...

[anonymous]

This is great stuff and it totally made my morning to see it pop up in my mailbox. Can't wait for more. :)

[lunamystik]

This second part was wonderful, and heartwrenching, and just filled with so much love... you know, I love that we only get Ben's POV here, because I think that also reading Leslie's would kill me just a little bit.

There were so many lines that I could quote in this part, lines that really touched me, or that were just so perfectly Ben, but I'll choose only one that I adored:

Leslie looks down at him with bright, gleeful eyes and whispers “Let’s do it again” and it doesn’t matter if she’s a deity or a queen or simply Leslie who lives down the hall, he’s powerless to refuse.

[cypanache]

Awww thank you. I love line quoting. It's really one of my favorite forms of feedback because I'm always fascinated by what hooks someone. Because sometimes its a line I write that I'm like "yeah, that's it, that's the line for this part" and sometimes it's something I totally wrote as a throwaway moment, just an aside because it worked for that instant (like the spies line that everyone keeps coming back to from the last chapter). And I just love knowing what clicked for people.

So yeah, thank you and thank you for the line quoting.

[rikyl]

I am so into this! It's kind of fun and heart-wrenching at the same time. Looking forward to more, as fast you can crank it out. :)

[spottedpenguin]

Okay, so I have this long-standing policy against reading WIPs, but the premise of this was just too good to pass up and WOW...the story is just so very, very amazing and perfect and sweetly heartbreaking all rolled into one and even better than I hoped for when I clicked that link. It's so good it's making me type poorly-constructed run-on sentences.

So, so many things are just perfectly Leslie & Ben that I couldn't list all of my favorites. I think my favorite part so far has to be from part 1 when Ben's thrilled that "there’s going to be at least like five-percent of Leslie that only wants to make out with her boyfriend so she can play spies with him." That is just early Leslie and Ben summarized in one sentence--Ben pining and admiring and Leslie hopelessly clueless about charming her new friend. It's wonderful.

Also, the conversations at the doors? I'd like to order one Ben Wyatt at around age 30, please.

[cypanache]

Well thank you for clicking (though obviously I can't actually take credit for the premise since it was someone's prompt and I really want to give that person a hug, so yeah if it's your prompt could you pm me or something so I can say thanks), but I'm glad you felt the execution of the story lived up to the promise of the premise so far.

Yeah there's this thing going around tumblr about Ben/doors being an otp! perhaps second only to plaid (because seriously he has a ridiculous number of awesome moments in doorways), so having them have so many conversations in doorways is my little nod to our awesome fandom. But also, yeah . . . I do love all the conversations they have there, emotional honesty in hallways, who knew?

[allthingsholy]

I am still enjoying this very, very much. SO MUCH. I like how awkward it is, but still heartfelt, and always feels like Ben and Leslie.

And mostly I came here to say that I actually know someone that this happened to. My aunt's sister ended up marrying her stepbrother. They were teenagers when their parents got married and then they eventually ended up getting married too. I'm sure it makes for an awkward "how did you guys first meet" storytime, but I don't actually find it that weird? Plus, I think it's a perfect teenaged parallel to their forbidden office romance from canon.

Basically: keep on keepin' on, lady. I LOVE IT.

[cypanache]

Thanks. That's really interesting that you know someone this happened to, because obviously this can't be unheard of.

But yeah I think the step-siblings idea is what made me pick this prompt. Like I never would have just done a high-school!au without that additional factor because I couldn't have figured out the right canon parallel, but this is really almost perfect (so seriously if it's your brilliant prompt let me know, I owe you a cookie).

[allthingsholy]

LOL, it isn't mine, no. I actually haven't really been to the kink!meme, though I do continually check for Seth Myers/Bill Hader prompts. ... Don't judge me.