I suck
I just read what my grade for my analysis paper was and I got a 115/150, but the comments on my paper kind of pissed me off in a way I guess. I don't think that I'm cut out to stay in the film program and I think I might just change majors before I'm forced to. This really fucking blows it does. Here is the comment I received about my paper:
I must say, this paper seems very rushed and disorganized. As I stated at the beginning, it is fraught with writing problems. Your vocabulary and ability to conceptualize seem relatively advanced but your grammar, syntax and structuring of sentences rather poor. This seems to suggest either a learning disability of some kind (have you been evaluated, ever?) or extreme lack of care in preparation. Even though you sort of organize your paper into discussion of formal elements, it often wandered away from the particular formal issue toward/ story/narrative elements. You've really overlooked large questions of style and meaning. You've missed the essential REALISM (a stylistic attribute) of Zeffirelli's film, which is evident in its mise-en--scene: real locations rather than sets, age-appropriate actors rather than glamorous (older) movie stars; subjective, mobile camera work (often hand-held). Each film has a style HIGHLY suggestive of the period in which it was made: the Classical Hollywood style that dominated in the 1930s, the realism that came into fashion after WWII, especially in Europe, and the MTV generation's post-modern pastiche, typical of much POP culture in the last years of the 20th century. These are the kinds of general historical points the assignment expects you to be able to connect to your analysis. Please do rewrite; you might earn some additional points for doing so. As is, this is a "C" 115/150. sf
WTF? I don't want to go to the fucking writing center. I've been there once since I've been at SIU and they didn't fucking help me at all. I know my papers don't usually make sense but neither do my thoughts. My thoughts are often quite disorganized, I'm seriously really fucking upset right now all over this goddamn paper and now I have another one to write that is due next Monday. Ugh
I must say, this paper seems very rushed and disorganized. As I stated at the beginning, it is fraught with writing problems. Your vocabulary and ability to conceptualize seem relatively advanced but your grammar, syntax and structuring of sentences rather poor. This seems to suggest either a learning disability of some kind (have you been evaluated, ever?) or extreme lack of care in preparation. Even though you sort of organize your paper into discussion of formal elements, it often wandered away from the particular formal issue toward/ story/narrative elements. You've really overlooked large questions of style and meaning. You've missed the essential REALISM (a stylistic attribute) of Zeffirelli's film, which is evident in its mise-en--scene: real locations rather than sets, age-appropriate actors rather than glamorous (older) movie stars; subjective, mobile camera work (often hand-held). Each film has a style HIGHLY suggestive of the period in which it was made: the Classical Hollywood style that dominated in the 1930s, the realism that came into fashion after WWII, especially in Europe, and the MTV generation's post-modern pastiche, typical of much POP culture in the last years of the 20th century. These are the kinds of general historical points the assignment expects you to be able to connect to your analysis. Please do rewrite; you might earn some additional points for doing so. As is, this is a "C" 115/150. sf
WTF? I don't want to go to the fucking writing center. I've been there once since I've been at SIU and they didn't fucking help me at all. I know my papers don't usually make sense but neither do my thoughts. My thoughts are often quite disorganized, I'm seriously really fucking upset right now all over this goddamn paper and now I have another one to write that is due next Monday. Ugh