Fic: Always Alright

[csg1]

Title: Always Alright 
Prompt: 4. What could I say to you, except, "I love you" , and "I'd give my life for yours" from
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Characters/Pairing: Doctor/Donna, metions of Doctor/River, Donna/Lee
Rating: PG
Genre: Angst, hurt/comfort
Spoilers: Silence in the Library/Forest of the Dead, The Doctor's Daughter, The Sonataran Stratagem (sort of) and Voyage of the

Comments

[persiflage_1]

That's sad... *squishes DonnaDoctor*

[csg1]

Thanks :)

*squishes DonnaDoctor with you because they've got so much angst*

[persiflage_1]

Yes they have...

(Don't forget to post this on walkinthedust !)

[csg1]

Thank, done it now. Forgot about that one! :)

[persiflage_1]

:(

[csg1]

Remembered it now, though!

BTW, can you see anywhere where the speech is 'incorrectly punctuated' I've tried posting it on Teaspoon, but I got a email back saying it was rejected because of that. It's not the first time it's done this and I can't see what they mean :(

[persiflage_1]

You do have a handful of typos in it, actually - want me to make a list and PM it to you?

[csg1]

That would be really helpful, thanks :)

I don't suppose sleep deprivation would be a reasonable excuse for my sloppiness? :)

[persiflage_1]

Working on it now. Your commonest error is full stops inside speech marks before the qualifier (eg. "For the better." Donna said firmly should read "For the better," Donna said firmly)

But you've a few other errors there as well so I'll send you a list.

And we all make mistakes when we're tired...

[beandelphiki]

You also don't have commas in all the spots where dialogue comes mid-sentence. Oh, I don't know what that's called right now. Like here:

She smiled “Just look at me.

You need some sort of punctuation - period or comma - between "smiled" and "'Just...'"

It's brilliant, by the way. I like that they end up comforting each other, although it's very Doctor that ends up holding her while she cries.

[csg1]

Thanks. Just fixed it :)

But other than that, glad you liked it. I'd like to think that the Doctor would put Donna's pain before his own because that's the sort of selfless person he is. Aw...

(Plus, you're icon's very appropriate. Mind you, with Ten I suppose it's always appropriate :))