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angeljojo March 30 2007, 07:39:12 UTC
Wow that was a great story it was intense and very sexy I liked it please share more story's like that you kept me in suspense every moment thanx for sharing

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crystalsc March 30 2007, 11:55:42 UTC
Thank you. I really like Reagan. I might bring her back. :D

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x5vale March 30 2007, 08:06:51 UTC
Wow! Sexy and powerful!

So Dean-ish.

Adding to my next fic rec:D

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crystalsc March 30 2007, 11:54:05 UTC
Thank you. I forgot to mention that I hadn't proof-read it prior to posting. If you noticed any errors, please feel free to point them out.

I worried that it wouldn't sound like Dean because I was concentrating so much on the non-verbal parts. When he spoke, I wanted it to sound like him.

What's fic rec? Thank you again for your kind comments. Like I said, this is my very first fanfic and only the 2nd story I've ever written. And I've never showed my writing to anyone.

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x5vale March 30 2007, 12:42:28 UTC
I'll read it and see if there is any mistakes.

Fic recs are the reccomended fictions.

*hugs*

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alexajones22 April 9 2007, 09:32:33 UTC
The biggest thing you should work on is dialogue punctuation. The way you have it right now is grammatically incorrrect. A google search will reveal a ton of sites that describe how to do it correctly.

The other thing is that the story isn't really "Very NC-17" That description is usually saved for things like rape, BDSM and etc. A simple NC-17 or Hard R is more fitting.

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eilan March 30 2007, 14:01:42 UTC
wow.. that was great!!!
I so shouldn't have read it at work, lol

I think you should definitely bring Reagan back.. She's a good character!

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crystalsc March 30 2007, 14:15:01 UTC
really? i'm glad you liked it!

Girl, I turned myself on visualizing Dean as I was writing it! *fans self*

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eilan March 30 2007, 14:25:56 UTC
Yup, definitely liked it.. lol, I might have to re-read it when I get home..
hhmm.. hot sweaty Dean... rawr!

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kaoschic84 March 31 2007, 03:28:19 UTC
wow that was really hot *fans self* I really liked Reagan! I could definitely see Dean in the story! Great job especially for your first fanfic! Awesome!

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crystalsc April 1 2007, 15:23:17 UTC
Thank you! That makes me happy :D

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crystalsc August 14 2008, 04:55:49 UTC
Hello! This story of mine that I wrote a long time ago which you enjoyed...well, I just thought you might like to know that I've written a sequel (my first attempt at a multi-chapter). It's called What Are The Chances? and you can find it on my journal if you're interested. :)

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carcrash_heartz April 1 2007, 02:49:16 UTC
Yum! If I didn't want Dean before (which I DID), I do now. Sigh, if only I could be Reagan. Great little gem of a fic you have here, steamy, but filled with personality and depth of characters. It flows well, it feels natural within my head as I read it, and the exchange between Reagan and Dean was intense and well done. Thank you for sharing!

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crystalsc April 1 2007, 15:32:26 UTC
Thank you. I was really unsure since this is my first fic. Thanks a bunch! :D

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crystalsc August 14 2008, 04:56:18 UTC
Hi! :) This story of mine that I wrote a long time ago which you enjoyed...well, I just thought you might like to know that I've written a sequel (my first attempt at a multi-chapter). It's called What Are The Chances? and you can find it on my journal if you're interested. :)

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