[fic] "At the Very Ports We Blow" 2/5 (Gen, Hei+Ed, R)

[cryogenia]

Title: At the very ports we blow (part 2 of 5)
Author: cryogenia
Pairing: None (gen)
Rating: R (rating has increased)
Prompt: For 7stages, set 2, #6: "the seed of the fire"
Spoiler level: Post-series, pre-movie

WARNINGS: This is I think the best chapter of any fic I have written to date. The fic is also increasingly filled with strife (not meaning character

Comments

[cryogenia]

<333 I'm so glad you like this. I thought of you when I was writing alter!Havoc.

[cryogenia]

<3333 I am glad to hear it! (You'll note I was undecided for an actual last name for my poor alter!Havoc; I actually know very little about French XD; )

[bentobsessed]

This is good as always. Rather makes me think Ed has some growing up to do though.

[cryogenia]

Yes, yes he does XD; They both do :-/

[nithela]

Omg. This has the unmistakable touch of high quality that marks every single one of yoir previous works.
The facts you put in along the lines makes me go O_o, because there are not many people actually knowing what they're writing about when they try to be smart and have some depth in their stories. I love that you actually know about the things you're bringing up (at least seem to do, and if you don't, you're a damn good pretender. And that's a huge compliment in itself)... um...where was I? Damn, your stories always make me ramble incoherently. Gah.

Well, I'm looking forward to the next chapter! And by the way, I adore that you're making them wanting to bite each other's heads off. Three thumbs up!

[cryogenia]

<33 Thanks - I'm glad you like what I'm doing with the chemistry stuff XD;; I would say I know just enough to be dangerous, but I'm glad it's coming off okay. If it degenerates into too much chemical mumbo-jumbo, please do let me know? I am trying very hard to keep the technical jargon to reasonable levels - but well, this is a relationship between two geeks, and geeks get into fights about technical things :)

[sharibet]

Love this, and was very happy to see part two pop up this morning. And I love your take on the early Ed/Alfons relationship...frustration, miscommunication, and general homesickness on Ed's part.

[cryogenia]

Yeah - poor Ed, he is so angry and frustrated and alone here, that he's forgetting to treat this alter!world like it has real people living in it >.<# (Not that Ed is particularly good at interacting with real people all the time anyway; imho, he's used to being able to be a complete brat because he's had Al around to hold him in check, and Mustang around to indulge him.)

[caitlinneko]

Loving this even more. I understand Ed's anger, but because of Alfons' last few lines of dialogue, and all, it's giving me the impression that Ed's missing soemthing here, and thus we are, as well, because it's from his point of view.
They both definitely need to grow up..

[cryogenia]

<3 I am so glad it is obvious that Ed is a biased observer ;_; I was really worried about that part.

And yes, they both need to grow up.

[caitlinneko]

Well when you think about it when a fic is done from one sole person's point of view (be it first or third person) it will almost always have a bias one way or another, right?

Otherwise Alter!Izumi, or someone, will have to force them to :)