Poem rec: Taking, and what's your idea of poetic?

[crowroad3]

Title: Taking
Poet: laughablelament
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Wincest
Tags/Warnings/Spoilers: incest kink
Prompt: "Taking some 'we' time." - Dean, 10.04 (Paper Moon)

Look at this sexy thing laughablelament posted at spnapo!  And by 'sexy' I don't mean the line breaks. (OK that too.)

We'd love some prompts or poems/poem-like things/lyrical drabbles/images/self-contained bits of fic/

Comments

[crowroad3]

"I started writing Higher Learning as poetry, couldn't get the lines to break organically, and so revised it into prose. I'm delighted that it still reads as poem-like to you, since I love structural hybrids.": I think I could hear/feel that in HL, the way it turns around an image, even in the way it breaks.

It probably won't surprise you that this happens to me too, in both directions. Sometimes a thing just will not come out as prose--and the boundary is always a fluid frontier. I think if structural hybrids (and other sorts of hybrids) didn't exist, most of my writing wouldn't exist, heh.

"I think most good prose has a sense of rhythm": yep. And I think I read very much like you, prose poem or lyric, whether "poetry" is suggested visually, in the breaks, or no.

McCann is stunning--I love exhalation and imperative, and I see it too, the way both "Taken" and Transatlantic" suspend us--yes, suspended breath; these three excellent examples of different technical paths to the same.
And yeah, this is one of those things poetry does (for me) considers the effects of breath and space; things excellent prose can do too...