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turlough July 7 2009, 14:06:31 UTC
Bob shucked his jacket and shirts, practically leapt out of his battered trainers. Frank blinked at the sudden appearance of more skin than he was used to seeing from his drummer.

OMG Bob's practically NAKED!!! ;-)

I will never stop feeling almost breathless when I read this bit, it's so powerful. The gradual change of their surroundings that turns explosive when the monsters appear, Frank losing control over his voices and then coming back to awareness covered in blood. Awesome!

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crowgirl13 July 7 2009, 14:48:21 UTC
OMG Bob's practically NAKED!!! ;-)

I KNOW! FRANK IS SHOCKED!!!
*giggles*

It's possible that that part is *more* shocking than the appearance of tentacled thingys.

Yeah, okay that's not likely, considering the situation. But it certainly helps unhinge Frank's world that much more.

I can't tell how pleased I am to hear that this section remains that potent on a second reading. It's admittedly one of my favorite sections - I really strive to get the fight scenes right, trying to balance the tension/inferred stuff with the action/concrete details. What a relief it is, knowing that that balance holds!

Thank you for commenting on this stuff again. As always, you comments are helpful and so encouraging.

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hammerhead22 July 17 2009, 21:43:26 UTC
I've read this before!! Have you posted somewhere else?

Can we have more mostly naked Bob? Yes! I'm that shallow.

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crowgirl13 July 17 2009, 21:53:03 UTC
Some of this - I think mostly the Frank bits, add a snip or two of Bob's POV - were first dumped in Terri's LJ as comment fic. It's probable that's where you read it [as I've not shared it elsewhere].

What, and I'm NOT that shallow???
Vast expanses of freckles and pale skin...nomnomnom...

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hammerhead22 July 17 2009, 21:55:07 UTC
Yes! It must have been Terri's LJ. You can always find the best comment fic over there!

Pale, freckled skin...drummer's shoulders and arms and back...blond hair... I'M NOT DROOLING. NOT A BIT.

:shifty eyes:

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crowgirl13 July 17 2009, 23:12:19 UTC
Yeah, her journal is a very nurturing environment. :D

*STARES at your description*

Ugh. Um... yeah. Me either.
*hands you a towel*

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mc_rowe_manz July 23 2009, 00:04:00 UTC
I still love this scene, though where you stop is sort of a killer tease for people who don't know what happens next :)

I do like how you show what happens, but you're not really detailed so it leaves the feeling of "is ___ what really happened?" which I like - it makes me want to find out more.

Plus, I love the way that the voices blend and kick Frank's instincts up a notch, even if he freaks out in the end.

Oh, and I like the nod in Matt's direction :D see - what we discussed about him was there all along!

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crowgirl13 August 3 2009, 13:06:49 UTC
You realize that your comment is a much bigger tease, right? ;P

It seems like suggesting the situation is working better than giving full details - which is lucky, since that means I don't have to figure out consistent monster anatomy. [Though, there have been requests for illustrations of the creepy crawlies... I'm a little leery of drawing 'em, though.]

Cool! *I* really like that bit with Frank's voices, but it's reassuring and exciting knowing that works for you as well. :)

*grins* And see, there you are, teasing with hints again. [Thank goodess that the muse plans ahead like that! It certainly makes the later stuff easier to weave in.]

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