Beta Request: SPN/TW/Avengers/BBC Sherlock/XMFC/Smallville
I know that is a ton of fandoms to put in one story, but it's a psych hospital!AU, with most of them being patients.
I wrote it for NaNoWriMo this year, and I'm not quite done, but for the most part it's down.
If anyone would be willing to help out with general things (flow, characterization, minor grammar), please let me know.
In case you'd like a preview of what it's like, you can read it under the cut.
Excerpt 1: (Sherlock Holmes and Hank McCoy - mention of Chris Argent, John Watson)
Sherlock takes a long pull of his cigarette, thin fingers alluring and elegant around it.
“He's the reason you’re out here, isn’t he? I can tell by the way you’re slouching rather than tense with the inevitable thought of 'how to let Tony down nicely' - yes, I'm aware you don’t swing that way, but Tony thinks he can make anyone his - that Fury is the cause for our current sharing of space. He does it often, not purposely mind you, but expect him to hang up on you during a time of need many more times. If you want my advice, which I feel like you should have asked for the first day you arrived, I’d recommend speaking to Chris or John if you have anything on your mind. Please do not tell me how perceptive I am because it would be an insult compared to the praise John has already given me.”
-----
Excerpt 2: (Tony Stark, Chris Argent, Hank McCoy)
Tony covers his mouth so Hank can’t hear, telling Chris, “I bet you he won’t remember any of this tomorrow.”
“I think he might. He's a smart kid, Tony,” Chris replies calmly, not even the slightest hint that he’s had double the amount of shots Hank has. “I'll take your bet.”
“Oh, yeah? If I win, you have to let me see you naked in your office. And I get to take pictures as soon as Jarvis is up and running.”
-----
Excerpt 3: (Loki, Thor, Tony Stark, Hank McCoy)
“It’s normal behaviour for him. I see no problem with him having a bit of fun if he is forced to remain in your facilities. It has been ten years after all.”
Loki is grinning devilishly when he purrs, “Thank you, Thor. I’m glad you’ve come to understand my way of thinking.”
Thor chuckles boisterously. “I don’t always understand, brother, but I do indeed try my best.”
Loki beams at that. “As you see, Tony, there was no reason for your involvement in my personal affairs. I cannot contract the diseases you fear.”
Thor mutters softly, “I would not be so sure.”
Loki hangs up on Thor, giving Tony and Hank a tight smile before leaving the room. Hank is forever at a loss of what to do with himself in these situations.
Thanks in advance. :)
I wrote it for NaNoWriMo this year, and I'm not quite done, but for the most part it's down.
If anyone would be willing to help out with general things (flow, characterization, minor grammar), please let me know.
In case you'd like a preview of what it's like, you can read it under the cut.
Excerpt 1: (Sherlock Holmes and Hank McCoy - mention of Chris Argent, John Watson)
Sherlock takes a long pull of his cigarette, thin fingers alluring and elegant around it.
“He's the reason you’re out here, isn’t he? I can tell by the way you’re slouching rather than tense with the inevitable thought of 'how to let Tony down nicely' - yes, I'm aware you don’t swing that way, but Tony thinks he can make anyone his - that Fury is the cause for our current sharing of space. He does it often, not purposely mind you, but expect him to hang up on you during a time of need many more times. If you want my advice, which I feel like you should have asked for the first day you arrived, I’d recommend speaking to Chris or John if you have anything on your mind. Please do not tell me how perceptive I am because it would be an insult compared to the praise John has already given me.”
-----
Excerpt 2: (Tony Stark, Chris Argent, Hank McCoy)
Tony covers his mouth so Hank can’t hear, telling Chris, “I bet you he won’t remember any of this tomorrow.”
“I think he might. He's a smart kid, Tony,” Chris replies calmly, not even the slightest hint that he’s had double the amount of shots Hank has. “I'll take your bet.”
“Oh, yeah? If I win, you have to let me see you naked in your office. And I get to take pictures as soon as Jarvis is up and running.”
-----
Excerpt 3: (Loki, Thor, Tony Stark, Hank McCoy)
“It’s normal behaviour for him. I see no problem with him having a bit of fun if he is forced to remain in your facilities. It has been ten years after all.”
Loki is grinning devilishly when he purrs, “Thank you, Thor. I’m glad you’ve come to understand my way of thinking.”
Thor chuckles boisterously. “I don’t always understand, brother, but I do indeed try my best.”
Loki beams at that. “As you see, Tony, there was no reason for your involvement in my personal affairs. I cannot contract the diseases you fear.”
Thor mutters softly, “I would not be so sure.”
Loki hangs up on Thor, giving Tony and Hank a tight smile before leaving the room. Hank is forever at a loss of what to do with himself in these situations.
Thanks in advance. :)