Fic: Underland (Sherlock Holmes / Neverwhere), PG-13 (9/17)

[crimson_adder]

Title: Underland
Author: crimson_adder
Fandoms: Sherlock Holmes (ACD) / Neverwhere (Gaiman!verse)
Rating: PG-13
Pairing / Characters: Holmes/Watson (eventually); Watson, marquis de Carabas.
Word Count: ~ 2600
Summary: John Watson loses a bet, grants a favour, and finds himself in a world unlike anything he has ever seen before. Except for how it's all the same

Comments

[alfa]

I loved this chapter as a whole, I loved how Watson sounded, I loved the subtle physicality between him and the Marquis, the build-up and Watsons wonderings about weather or not he would have come to regret it. My favorite is always Bisexual!Watson and Gay!Holmes because that just makes the most sense to me and so Watsons easy understanding of his own feelings felt right, adult and insightful - just as Watson is IMHO.

The moment after Watson has his meal is such a true, earthy moment. The normality of it felt steadying (not to mention cute) in the crazyness that is London Below and the Marquis.

You killed me twice with the ending. First when they didn't kiss (because 'oh I would never kiss anyone because I love Holmes so, even though he doesn't seem to have any interest in sex with men or even in-general so I'm going to stay completely faithful to my own unrequited love and obsession.' - That just doesn't feel honest most of the time. We are all human after all and personally I find what makes us human to be even more beautiful than the idea of what's human, the mirage if you will (wow, English is my third language so I really hope that came out as intended and no as some insane and confusing bable) so to sum up: the moment was hot and the 'not kissing' was also hot and made me go GUH aloud.
Ok, so on to the second thing that killed me (and I'm sorry but this needs CAPS) - THE OMG CLIFFHANGER!! I NEED THE NEXT CHAPTER LIKE I NEED AIR!

And to conclude - love your writing and thank you for sharing.

[crimson_adder]

I know, right? I was so excited to finish this with a cliffhanger, it so totally wouldn't have ended any other way. XD

Thanks so much! I'm always glad when people find my characterisation realistic and right, 'cause I think those little details are the most important to ground people in their worlds. (it's 7am, that might not make sense) And YES, I'm glad you liked that almost-kiss moment! :D I wrote another version where they do kiss, but I don't write porn/porn-like-things ever so when I had someone else look over it and they were less than helpful I just lost all confidence. ><

But yeah, I think that Watson - if he truly believed that he would never see Holmes again - would hold on to his love, but not enough to drag him down if he can find the reassurance he need.

Thank you as well! <3 I enjoy reading your comments always.