Fic: Underland (Sherlock Holmes / Neverwhere), PG-13 (8/17)

[crimson_adder]

Title: Underland
Author: crimson_adder
Fandoms: Sherlock Holmes (ACD) / Neverwhere (Gaiman!verse)
Rating: PG-13
Pairing / Characters: Holmes/Watson (eventually); Watson, marquis, various other Underlanders
Word Count: ~ 1700
Summary: John Watson loses a bet, grants a favour, and finds himself in a world unlike anything he has ever seen before. Except for how

Comments

[anonymous]

Hooray Hooray, more to read! And you say it's going to get even *more* exciting after this chapter?

Your characterizations are spot on! I imagine it's not easy to capture some of the things we love about Watson while writing in first person--he's so unassuming. But you are doing an awesome job; his reaction at the Gap, his guileless joy of the circus, and his handshake lesson with Hammersmith (love!) make his caring nature shine through, and are a great contrast to his temper with the Marquis (and I rather think we haven't seen the last of that?).

I think you're doing well with the interest between de Carabas and Watson so far. It makes sense that the Marquis would be drawn to Watson--he's just so intriguingly out of place (and handsome). And I can see Watson gravitating toward the Marquis as a (slightly more) stable point in all this madness. The comparisons to Holmes seemed perfect for his current state of mind. Even if Watson thinks he'll never see Holmes again, though, their bond was too strong, and Watson too steady and stalwart for me to buy a new relationship within the scope of your story (unless it covers a much longer time-span than I'm expecting now). Of course that doesn't mean that Holmes wouldn't see the mutual interest and the *possibility* when he finally shows up, and there's nothing to stop him being possessive and/or jealous just because of that, lol.

[crimson_adder]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the feedback! <3

I was hoping that people would understand Watson's conflicting emotions, which are sort of flip-flopping between despair, anger, and awe, so I'm glad you think so! The hardest part of writing in first person is remembering that he's also writing it, rather than experiencing it for the first time, but I'm trying to imitate ACD's style, which is very similar.

I think the problem with proposing something between Watson and the marquis is that I tried to use the word "relationship", which is way too permanent and yeah, long term, for what I really intend. As I told someone else, this isn't anything big, just a way for Watson to maintain some form of control over the craziness that has become his life.

:D Thanks for reading and your awesome input! <3