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[fic] five acts: my list

Apr 18, 2010 13:27

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Jack/Claire, road trips and old motels, PG gemjam April 18 2010, 19:12:16 UTC

She likes to stay in the most broken down of places. Jack thinks it’s because it matches her mood, but he doesn’t like to think about that. She’s not broken to him, she’s perfect, like an angel in dirty clothes that never seem to get clean anymore. That’s one of the reasons he likes to undress her. She’s so flawless underneath ( ... )

Re: Jack/Claire, road trips and old motels, PG crickets April 18 2010, 19:50:29 UTC

Oh gosh I love that last line. This is just arresting. I love the contradiction throughout this whole thing. You've really captured a side of Claire, or at least, the Claire in my head, that I just love. Thank you so much for writing them!

♥!

Re: Jack/Claire, road trips and old motels, PG gemjam April 18 2010, 19:54:22 UTC

You're welcome, sweetie, I'm glad that you like it :)

Re: Jack/Claire, road trips and old motels, PG gigglemonster April 19 2010, 00:35:59 UTC

Oh the imagery in this is amazing.
So hopeful and beautiful. I love this :)

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Re: Lost, Claire/Jack, tattoos, travel, in secret crickets April 19 2010, 00:26:58 UTC

Oh my lord!
*fans self*
I love this. LOVE. It's just so intimate and yet hot at the same time and I love the pink tattoo and yes.

This:
he knows her so well by now, better than he ought to. He knows how she works. That means something, doesn't it? That has to mean something.

Love that.

And the ending. Those last three paragraphs.

Perfect. Perfection. Thank you!

*dies*

Re: Lost, Claire/Jack, tattoos, travel, in secret gigglemonster April 19 2010, 00:30:18 UTC

Hooooooo boy, GUH!
Hot and intense and I agree, those last three paragraphs are just perfect.

out of the ashes we might be reborn, Jack/Sun, travel, angst, tattoos ozmissage April 18 2010, 21:41:32 UTC

Somewhere in the waking they lost some essential bit of themselves, she had a daughter that would never be, he had a son that he did not know ( ... )

Re: out of the ashes we might be reborn, Jack/Sun, travel, angst, tattoos crickets April 19 2010, 00:31:26 UTC

I love the entire concept of this. That first line kind of just punches you in the gut, doesn't it? Ouch. It's the perfect scenario to have them thrown together.

It's sweet and subtle and just dark enough to suit me.

I really love the stuff about his tattoo and how Sun takes comfort in that it still exists. Really love that for some reason.

Her finger lands on a plot of land in the center of the country, far, far away from any ocean.

I'm with Jack on this one: Perfect.

And I adore that last line. Sun saying she'll drive. It really fits here and fits the transformation she's been on all these seasons.

Re: out of the ashes we might be reborn, Jack/Sun, travel, angst, tattoos ozmissage April 20 2010, 14:26:01 UTC

Thank you so much, I'm so glad you liked it!

I love reading this pairing, but I had never written them before. Sun's voice is always hard for me to get a handle on. :)

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Re: jack/sun; angst & tatoos; r crickets April 19 2010, 00:33:58 UTC

Oh OUCH. That is definitely angsty.

I just adore this line:
grateful as her shivering teeth pierce the ink in his arm, tasting make-believe stars and sweat and sand and sour. you promised you promisedyoupromised.

I really am impressed with the style of this and how well it works and how coherent it is. I didn't even really realize what you'd done until after I was done reading. Well done!

Thank you so much!

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Re: Jacob/Richard; Angst, In Secret; PG-13/R crickets April 19 2010, 03:42:55 UTC

Oh ouch, that last paragraph is heartbreaking, but I love the quietness of this. Really well done! Thank you!