jadie

[mickeylimon]

jadie i called your name
you were the light and you were sane
you were courageous yet so naive
and so i left you as you leave

jadie who told you not to say good-bye
i know i was there but at least i tried
and i know back then you used to try
but now jadie please try to justify

jadie you were the witness
you were cursed but so damn blessed
i'm insane, i'm

Comments

[etherized]

I really like the overall flow, and message of this. It's gonna be fun to read aloud. My only complaint is the repetition of the word try in the second stanza, I would cut one or two of them out.

hi :D

[mickeylimon]

thanks :D
yea i checked on that line, i think i ran out of words to rhyme when i wrote it hehehe any suggestions? :)