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crabby_lioness

Fic: The Tale of the Big Bad Wolf: When Martha Met Jack (1/3)

Apr 05, 2007 14:37

Fic: The Tale of the Big Bad Wolf: When Martha Met Jack (1/3)
Sequel to Post-Mortem, may be read as a stand-alone story

Author: CrabbyLioness

Characters:  Jack, Ten, Martha

Summary: Martha wonders who the strange man who just appeared on the TARDIS is, and why the Doctor is so freaked out.

Rating:  PG for adult themes.

Disclaimer: Don't own them.   ( Read more... )

fic, post-mortem, big bad wolf

Comments 60

Very Good tx_dragonfly March 30 2007, 06:20:59 UTC

More Please!

Re: Very Good crabby_lioness March 30 2007, 12:33:10 UTC

Coming soon! Check back in a few days.

Re: Very Good reasdream April 5 2007, 20:35:32 UTC

omg icon love!

Re: Very Good mustang_bex1126 April 8 2007, 01:50:59 UTC

You're icon is made of win... I just died of teh joy!

Thread 5

amythest_n_ice March 30 2007, 23:15:44 UTC

much sqeeeeee-ness. Can't wait for the rest of this.

Will there be Doc/Jack smoochies? There has to be at least a comparison kiss, see how the new Doc measures up to the old. PLEASE!

crabby_lioness March 31 2007, 03:19:50 UTC

I honestly don't know yet. They've got a bunch of other issues to get through first. The Doctor is going to just about have a heart attack before the end of Part 2.

msp_hacker March 31 2007, 03:22:23 UTC

The part where Jack is asking the TARDIS whether the Doctor has been good to her and she vocally rolls her eyes at the suggestion? I really hope something like that plays out in cannon.

crabby_lioness March 31 2007, 03:27:06 UTC

That's the first part of this story I wrote. That so needs to happen.

msp_hacker April 1 2007, 22:54:39 UTC

"Hello Sweetheart" needs a comma "Hello, Sweetheart."

And, convention: World War 2 should be World War II.

He pressed some buttons. "Let's see. There's smaller Rifts in Paris, Cairo, New York.... I've never been to New York. Let's go to New York." I don't know whether or not this needs fixing, but saying "New York" for the third time seems odd. Though I just ran it though my head and changed the Doctor's modulation of those three sentences and it worked, so I don't know.

Before reading this, I never realized that the Doctor heard Jack die. And then I had to go watch that relevant section of "The Parting of the Ways" and OMG he does. Add in fact since all the comm systems were open, everyone heard the slaughter of the people on floor zero and when another one of their people went down. ACK! And I'm really, really stupid for not realizing this until two years down the line. *sigh*

crabby_lioness April 5 2007, 19:42:42 UTC

I don't know whether or not this needs fixing, but saying "New York" for the third time seems odd. Though I just ran it though my head and changed the Doctor's modulation of those three sentences and it worked, so I don't know.

He gets hung up on a word sometimes. Remember "thumb" in Tooth and Claw?

Before reading this, I never realized that the Doctor heard Jack die. And then I had to go watch that relevant section of "The Parting of the Ways" and OMG he does.

It was just the other side of an interior wall. Both gunfire and the sound of a 175lb dead weight slamming into that wall would have been both audible and all too identifiable.

Finished! Yay!

prologi March 31 2007, 18:19:10 UTC

"Jack, you died."

"Yeah, but I got better."

Inappropriate Monty Python flashback time! :D ("She turned me into a newt!")

You're missing some commas there, but aside from that, it's all good. I hope you explain the power leak and the daleks at some point, though.

crabby_lioness March 31 2007, 18:26:22 UTC

The Daleks will appear in the middle of S3. This is set near the end of S3. The power leak will be explained in Part 2.

onigaminanashi April 5 2007, 21:05:33 UTC

Such good stuff!!!! I cannot wait for the next part!!

crabby_lioness April 5 2007, 21:18:52 UTC

Thank you!