SPN Fic: Origin Stories

[coyotesuspect]

Oh god, I've finished something. In fact, this is the longest thing I have ever finished.

Title: Origin Stories
Fandom: Supernatural
Rating: PG 13
Summary: Sarah's willing to accept that ghosts are real. She's a little more skeptical that a string of suicides in Albany might be the work of one. Sarah, Jo, extremely mild Sarah/Jo
Word Count: ~8200

Comments

[cantarina1]

WORTH EVERY SECOND OF THE WAIT. EVERY ONE. <33333333

Where to start?

You know how much I love badass hunting chicks and looking over my reading notes, it's what I was getting geared up for, but in terms of the story it tells about Sarah, this was so much better. She does something with her experiences, but it takes a long, slow build and that it's this
It’s the obvious grief that finally gets her, speaks to a similar ache in her own chest. She knows what it’s like to lose someone suddenly, but at least she was able to know the reason behind it.
that pushes her into action. The motivation is so personal and strikes so true to the character in a way that has nothing to do with you or I wanting to talk her up and that's what really sells it. I also really love that she's not perfect or even especially good, at the hunting part. She panics and freezes and nearly gets killed; it's Jo that saves the day. It's really okay not to be awesome at something on the second go and even though Jo feels like she failed to protect Sarah, who is a civilian, she probably saved her life all the same.

Sam and Dean's cameo really, really worked for me. You nailed both of their voices (Dean's booty call comment made me laugh!) I miss this Sam; it would be a different conversation, now, and not just because of the further distance and time between them.

The use of Jo was A++ I loved the contradictions in her, how she obviously cares for the Winchesters in the way she gets protective of them but also, maybe doesn't quite want to go there either, and how she harps on Sarah for her motivations for hunting when her own aren't exactly the norm either. There's a subtle complexity to both women that they really tease out of each other. The intellectual elements of the discussion, like words as violence, were a great addition. We've had those themes come up on the show, but the turns of phrase here are exactly suited to Sarah's education level and milieu. (I think that part of the reason I love them is because they ring true to me; that's my discourse.)

Also? They both get to show up, save the day, and kiss the pretty girl \o/ I really love how subtle this is, the way it allows for multiple interpretations, and how it feels incredibly natural and believable in a way that sex scenes (while hot) normally don't.

Jo’s in flannel and jeans, trucker casual, and Sarah’s beginning to wonder if it’s some kind of hunter dresscode.
<3

She sits down on the single bed in the room and Sarah sits down next to her. Jo has clothes and weapons scattered around the room; the place looks wrecked and something about it strikes Sarah as vaguely unprofessional. Whatever Jo’s reason may be for hunting, Sarah’s beginning to think she hasn’t been hunting for very wrong.
Nice detail.

Her hair is wild, a stormcloud around her head
Like the icon says, hell yes, I love this Jo.

“I have a home,” she cries, voice cracking around the final word.
Ah, this is after she runs away from the Roadhouse, isn't it? Oh Jo.

A couple of small problems:
sShe bends her head over her own stack of newspapers.
Too many "s"!
or relieved that he at least left her that much piece of mind.
Should be "peace"
and still make it home sometime, night and keep her promise to her father.
A missing word, maybe? Or you changed your mind about the turn of phrase?
The latter’s a much harder decision than the latter.
There should be a former in there somewhere.

This is so wonderful and I'm so glad you wrote it with so much obvious thought poured into it.

[coyotesuspect]

Oh, wow. Thank you for such a fantastic, thoughtful reply.

I really enjoyed having the chance to root through Sarah's mind in this. She's not a character I've given much thought to, so it took me awhile to figure out what her motivations might be. So I'm really glad it works for you.

Dean's booty call comment is actually one of the first things I wrote. *g* It just seemed like exactly the kind of thing he would say if Sarah ever did call.

I am so, so glad Jo worked for you. There were a lot of things I wanted to say about her- her motivations for hunting, her complicated relationship to the Winchesters (especially Dean), her issues with civilians/amateurs hunting even though she might be considered one. There are a lot of contradictions in her character (or at least my interpretation of her), and I'm ecstatic that those came through.

They both get to show up, save the day, and kiss the pretty girl

That line- that whole scene actually- was one of the last things I wrote. I needed a way to sum up the whole experience.

Ah, this is after she runs away from the Roadhouse, isn't it? Oh Jo.

In my head, this takes place after Born Under a Bad Sign, but it works any time in season 2 after No Exit.

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes! Those have been fixed. <3

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