Fic: Priorities

[cowboyguy]

Title: Priorities
Fandom: Supernatural
Words: 1808
Prompt: Written as a fill for a prompt at tarotgal’s commentfic meme: I adore the sneezefic staple where one character is obviously coming down with something but keeps denying it until it bites him in the ass. I want to see the opposite, which is less used in sneezefics. A character is obviously coming

Comments

[tarotgal]

Oh man. This is just what I needed after such a miserable week. But I'm barely able to keep my eyes open long enough to type this. So feedback will have to wait.

I loved it, though, especially the spellings. OMG and the stuffy talk. And Dean taking charge of both situations. And oh man, this part: “heh… Deand… deed a ti-hh… tiss-“

Love the description of the walk to the gravesite, too. Beautiful wording. And the bouncing flashlight beam. Seriously, this is beautiful. I love it. SO MUCH. Proper feedback when I can see straight.

[cowboyguy]

Yay, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Sorry you had such a rough week, but I hope today/this week is much better. Glad I could help make it a little better, though. :)

I'm glad you liked the spellings. They're a little different from my normal Sam sneezes, but for some reason I was really into the kinds of sneezes where one comes right after the other so it's like multiple sneezes in one breath, and I tried to do that.

Thanks so much for the feedback! Hope you got some proper rest, too.

[anilkex1]

So this is twice now that I've needed a fix (omg that sounds bad) and found something you wrote that just...Mmmmm yes.

The conversation in the car...where Sam says that he thinks he caught something...omg...BUTTON BUTTON BUTTON. It just...YESSSssss!

I also loved the description of their walk to the grave - the cicadas, the flashlights crisscrossing on the path, so vivid.

And the word "achy". I think that's one of my new favorite words.

Perfect fill, perfect timing, so thank you!!!

[cowboyguy]

Yay! I'm glad I could be of assistance. And that I could push buttons of the happy-making variety. :D

Glad you liked the forest description. I guess it really did help when I went out to a park to write this fic. It was such a nice day, and I just needed a place to concentrate, and I guess it made its way in there.

"Achy" is a nice word. I'm quite fond of "desperate" and "breathless", myself.

Glad you enjoyed it!

[sexualoddity]

I like this a lot :)

I love how actually, the way the prompt is, Dean could have come over as a total asshole, but you make it absolutely work for their characters.

I feel like maybe Dean is a little dismissive because he doesn't WANT Sam to be sick (maybe if he doesn't acknowledge it, it won't be true), and of course irritated-pissy-Sam is always brilliant, and you capture him perfectly. AAAAND then when Dean actually cottons on he's SO lovely. Its great that he barely says anything - it's all in the actions, getting Sam to sit down while he digs, carrying the stuff back to the car, getting him the tissues... So sweet!