Scattered Vertebrae (II)

[countingcr0ws]

Title: Scattered Vertebrae
Author: countingcr0ws
Pairing/ Characters: Yunjae
Rating: PG
Form: One-shot, Sequel ( 1 | 2 )
Genre: AU, Generally Happy, Lucid, Slice of Life
Summary: Jaejoong finds himself walking on a thin line, wondering if having nothing, or nothing, is better.

Comments

[songbird52317]

I really enjoyed this. I loved the misdirection you used. I was so sad for Yunho and his desperate love for Jaejoong. I pictured him as just some cubicle worker. Ha, ha! And then to discover in Part 2 that Jae is just as desperately in love with him and that he's the head of some company. So sweet. I didn't mind at all the repetition. I loved the interplay between the colognes and both so terribly afraid of losing the other.

Now what I really want is one more chapter. I want to hear that conversation continue - when they come clean with each other, express their love and laugh and cry over their fears, share their hopes and dreams, etc.

Thanks for writing this sweet, angsty story.

[countingcr0ws]

Omg. Stap. Stap it. Omg. So I read your comment yesterday and I was like manz that is hard, I don't think I can, bla bla and I was rereading it today like the both parts, and I could see the sequel? Like omg. Why. /crawls to clutch at your hem. HAHAHA. CREEPASS. HAHAHA. But honestly you've succeeded in putting it in my mind and I guess its easier to do that because this world is pretty much set up and I'll admit that there's potential for that to happen. :( I was initially like so done with it. Like maybe because it sounds so angsty or smth. Which is why nobody seems to like it, haha. Idk. But yeah. So I was like rewatching inception a little while back and Cobb said that like an idea was the most addictive thing or smth of that sort. Or was it the hardest to look away from and yeah. You don't know the gravity of it when I say that you've succeeded in putting the idea of it in my mind. Its really gonna happen and you better read it. OMG. HAHAHAHA. WHAT. OMG. I APOLOGIZE FOR MY FINGERS. OMG. THAT WAS SO RUDE. OMG. /NOOOOOOOOOZ. haha.

[songbird52317]

Oh my, I'm so excited my comment has inspired you to write more! I'll be watching for it.

I think when I read 'paper pusher' an image of him entered my brain and wouldn't let go. It certainly seemed to fit the way he thought about himself in relation to Jae. So when you mentioned the newspaper articles I still assumed he was just one of the individuals on a project team. LOL.

Regarding angst - you're right, this doesn't have the claw in the heart where I've suddenly broken out into tears, but it does have a sense of incipient loss to it, with both of them believing the other doesn't really care for them except for the physical relationship. And somehow in this encounter they're able to hear each other through their touches. Because Yunho never actually says his "I love you" out loud, right? It's a lovely story.

[countingcr0ws]

Yeah! I guess that there's this rolling undercurrent of sadness that keeps you on the edge, haha.
And I actually have like a lot of plots but I never have the time to really write them. /crouches. And finals are approachingggg. I swear that that's a total mess of a marathon. Haha. I'm actually excited though. /heh.

[songbird52317]

I understand. Things have been non-stop I have at least two other major stories in my head besides the one I'm writing, but I won't let myself start them until I finish the one. (Though every so often I've dropped in a one-shot when a story won't leave me alone.) I don't know if that's the right strategy or not. I keep coming up with non-AU stories to write and it's hard and takes a lot of research. OTL. I wish the things would just write themselves from the images and conversations in my head. Getting them down well on paper is the issue. I have so much more empathy/sympathy for writers now that I'm actually writing.