Fic: "Night Terrors" (PG-13 for violence)

[corvetteclaire]

Title: Night Terrors
Author: CorvetteClaire
Rating: PG-13 (violence)
Summary: Harry dreams of Azkaban.
Disclaimer: The characters belong to J.K. Rowling, not to me. I am borrowing them for entertainment purposes only, not for profit.
Feedback: Yes, please! I would love to know what you think.

Comments

[corvetteclaire]

The "follow-up explanation" scene is the one I was referring to before - the leftover bit from the story's earlier incarnation. That style of "telling too much" is one I make an effort to avoid in my polished stuff, but I often use it to get from dialogue bit to dialogue bit in rough drafts or personal fluff-fics where I don't care how many lines I cross. And it's very easy to slip from indirect narration to the Author Notes style of recounting the story, when I'm not paying attention. It's the kind of thing I sometimes don't clean out until the second or third edit.

Well, all I can say is that this story got one too few edits.

You said:
"Like I put together a theory on what your writing is supposed to be like and am trying to bind you to it. bad critic!..."

I say:
No, not bad critic! Very observant reader who takes the time to figure out the signature structure and style (have some alliteration, why don't you?) of an author and catch her up on it when she gets sloppy. That's the stuff *good* critics are made of, in my book.

Miscellaneous observations:
You may have noticed that I love writing dialogue, and that's usually the part of the story that gets the most attention from me. It's the final scene between Harry and Draco that inspired me to actually post this fic. I liked it enough that I didn't want to keep it locked up on my hard drive.

It's very interesting that the moment when Harry admits that he'd rather lose Hermione or Ron than Draco worked so well for you. I'm glad it did. I'm still not sure how I feel about it, myself, though I was confident enough that it was right to leave it in. Maybe, like Harry, I'm uncomfortable with that less-than-altruistic facet of his character.

And a final note about this fic being the ending to my series... it isn't exactly. It's more like my first stab at creating the environment and the emotional landscape of Azkaban. And in that way, it *inspired* what will be the climactic scene in the third story (still untitled). That's the best way I can describe it without telling you the plot of a story I haven't written yet and don't want to spoil.

And now I think I'd best shut up, before I blow up the LJ server!

Thanks again for all your wonderful insights and comments! And if you want to send me more or continue this discussion, fire away!

[balfrog]

Thanks fo putting up with me and the ramble-
I do so like talking about writing, and I was hoping not to come across as nitpicking because I'm in it because your writing's so special to my fandom experience. There are other writers-quite well known and loved BNFs- who do a bit of the overlong explanation- which I CAN read and enjoy, but I put on my second favorites list because it's not as tight and perfect as your finished work.

Anyway, off off.... you're probably poring over more A&S, and I don't want to be the one who stalled you! (godforbid)

cheers, flowers, amphibians~
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