Comments | contrelamontre: "Look Away." Lotrips. BB/OB, BB/DM.

kaydeefalls in contrelamontre

"Look Away." Lotrips. BB/OB, BB/DM.

Feb 27, 2003 23:12

Title: Look Away ( Read more... )

Comments 12

paradise_city February 27 2003, 21:12:47 UTC

Oh, man. That was great. I love the boffday champagne reference because that's definitely one of the best DVD moments. The explanation of buddy fucks was true and amusing, and that last section about being an outsider was brilliant.

Great stuff!

kaydeefalls February 28 2003, 23:32:06 UTC

Thank you! Glad you liked. And heh, yeah, I've been trying to work that Billy/Orli bit from the DVD into a fic for a loooong time...

bellsforme February 27 2003, 22:16:20 UTC

Ah, brilliant. I love your style. So casual, but you manage to getitallinthere, you know? And when I read the line for the challenge, this is what it should have started. This line was made for this piece.

*applauds*

kaydeefalls February 28 2003, 23:33:48 UTC

Oooh, thank you! I really wasn't sure about this fic. At all. It came out a little more disjointed than I wanted. So I'm very relieved that you think it worked!

poor_choices February 28 2003, 03:50:36 UTC

That was excellent. I particularly loved the way you contrasted the way Dom and Orlando screamed sex. Dom's was hilarious and simply perfect in this context. It flowed so well throughout and the ending was a brilliant climax. Well done.

kaydeefalls February 28 2003, 23:34:55 UTC

Heh, thank you! Wow, and I thought it came out a bit too disjointed. Glad you liked. ;)

lux__aeterna March 1 2003, 00:23:55 UTC

i really like this story because the ending seems so much like an open wound. it made me go, 'what is he serious about? what are they both getting themselves into?' and though this makes me sound like a freak, i was actually concerned for the guys.

also, i liked the way you described orli because-- hmm, yes. he really does just scream 'sex'. every atom of his being does.

Re: kaydeefalls March 1 2003, 19:25:15 UTC

it made me go, 'what is he serious about? what are they both getting themselves into?'
::smiles enigmatically:: I like being all mysterious and stuff. It amuses me.

Thank you! I'm glad you liked.

sheldrake March 1 2003, 07:15:10 UTC

Oh ah. Wonderful. You say you thought it was disjointed, but the whole structure worked very well for me. I particularly loved:

The thing about voyeurism is that no matter how much it turns you on, you still feel like an outsider. Distant. Detached. From Orlando. From your own body. You're just watching.

Startlingly good, and true.

kaydeefalls March 1 2003, 19:33:54 UTC

::is relieved::

Thank you muchly! Glad it worked, and that you liked. ;)