Oh, man. That was great. I love the boffday champagne reference because that's definitely one of the best DVD moments. The explanation of buddy fucks was true and amusing, and that last section about being an outsider was brilliant.
Ah, brilliant. I love your style. So casual, but you manage to getitallinthere, you know? And when I read the line for the challenge, this is what it should have started. This line was made for this piece.
Oooh, thank you! I really wasn't sure about this fic. At all. It came out a little more disjointed than I wanted. So I'm very relieved that you think it worked!
That was excellent. I particularly loved the way you contrasted the way Dom and Orlando screamed sex. Dom's was hilarious and simply perfect in this context. It flowed so well throughout and the ending was a brilliant climax. Well done.
i really like this story because the ending seems so much like an open wound. it made me go, 'what is he serious about? what are they both getting themselves into?' and though this makes me sound like a freak, i was actually concerned for the guys.
also, i liked the way you described orli because-- hmm, yes. he really does just scream 'sex'. every atom of his being does.
it made me go, 'what is he serious about? what are they both getting themselves into?' ::smiles enigmatically:: I like being all mysterious and stuff. It amuses me.
Oh ah. Wonderful. You say you thought it was disjointed, but the whole structure worked very well for me. I particularly loved:
The thing about voyeurism is that no matter how much it turns you on, you still feel like an outsider. Distant. Detached. From Orlando. From your own body. You're just watching.
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Great stuff!
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*applauds*
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also, i liked the way you described orli because-- hmm, yes. he really does just scream 'sex'. every atom of his being does.
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::smiles enigmatically:: I like being all mysterious and stuff. It amuses me.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked.
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The thing about voyeurism is that no matter how much it turns you on, you still feel like an outsider. Distant. Detached. From Orlando. From your own body. You're just watching.
Startlingly good, and true.
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Thank you muchly! Glad it worked, and that you liked. ;)
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