Yes! Just... yes. You're my hero. The trust. The love. Sharpe! And this part: Lips brushed his forehead. Soft. Then he felt breath warm against his lips. He wanted to open his eyes, to see the dark head bowed over his own, but he was so tired. He licked his lips, and Harper's mouth was so close that he touched it with his tongue. Harper twitched then brought his mouth down on Sharpe's. Slow and light and lazy. This is even better than a sex scene. Really, it is--because it says so much. Thank you for posting. I'm deeply in love with this fic!
I really love how the sense of touch, in all its varieties, suffuses the story in many different ways, without being the obvious subject or point of the story. Hands and lips and cloth and blood and hair...
And you've captured the sound of the characters to a tee - the words that pass between the men sound just right.
and pain spiderwebbed through the bones of Sharpe's face Oooh, this description made me shiver.
I think it was more a case of me striking it. Hurling my frustrated self against it time and time again until some of it ebedded itself in me.
I really love how the sense of touch, in all its varieties, suffuses the story in many different ways, without being the obvious subject or point of the story.
Thanks! Spent some time earlier in the week spinning my wheels while I was thinking just in terms of texture. Once I let that go things got better. Still, I wasn't sure that this totally "fit" the touch challenge.
And you've captured the sound of the characters to a tee - the words that pass between the men sound just right.
Right off the bat, one of my favourite lines in the whole story. Love the wryness of it.
Very, very much like the transition from now to flashback. That was really vivid, and stood out beautifully.
This part-- turned his head to the side, and sank his teeth into flesh.
"Whoreson bastard! He bit me." --made me laugh, and it's so like Richard. Bloody man fights in his sleep, I swear.
He licked his lips, and Harper's mouth was so close that he touched it with his tongue. Harper twitched then brought his mouth down on Sharpe's. Slow and light and lazy.
Oh, lovely. I have to echo cinzia's sentiment here -- that part is amazing, and blazingly hot.
The characterizations were bang on, and the last line echoed the earlier one beautifully. 'Course, I have a thing for echoing lines in stories, so, yes. Wonderful!
Ah, the Sharpe expert has spoken, and now I can relax. Was a bit worried about pulling it off. I should have dedicated this one to you as well, since it was you who led me to the Sharpe goodness.
Very, very much like the transition from now to flashback. That was really vivid, and stood out beautifully.
Phew! Mops brow. That part gave me the most pain and was the hardest to manage. It means a lot to hear that it worked.
Hee. Glad you like the biting. That wasn't planned, just happened. It did seem rather...appropriate. Also glad you liked the kiss. It was planned, but also seemed appropriate. ^_^
Ah, the Sharpe expert has spoken, and now I can relax. *LOL* I don't know when/whether I earned that honour, but it's an amusing thought nevertheless.
I should have dedicated this one to you as well, since it was you who led me to the Sharpe goodness. *SMOOCH* Do you have any idea how much this is feeding my ego? Probably not a good thing. ^_~ Must lead all who will follow down the garden path... I'm *so* glad you're writing Sharpefic, because I've been dying for good stuff on that front, and it seems some is finally surfacing. :::nudging you and someone else:::
That part gave me the most pain and was the hardest to manage. You wouldn't know it.
Harper...was hurting him. Wouldn't hurt him. Harper had hurt him.... --Tumbles so effortlessly into-- Harper's fist connected with his jaw, --and surfaces again with-- Sharpe struggled, swung blindly, and heard a grunt of surprise.--that, as a reader, it's very, very easy to drown in the memory and resurface alongside Richard. Elegantly done
( ... )
Of course, you are the Sharpe expert. You've read the books and seen the movies; you know where all the ML's, websites, and archives hide. Expert.
Again, thanks for the flashback comments. I was fine with the re-entry into the present of the story, but the initial falshback had me worried. I didn't know if transition was smooth enough. Guess it was.
So... What would it take to get you to allow me to forward this to the sharpecc ML?
so very lovely and touching yet i loved it when sean turned and bit them to let them know he was still in charge of some things. wonderful characterizations!
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The trust. The love. Sharpe! And this part:
Lips brushed his forehead. Soft. Then he felt breath warm against his lips. He wanted to open his eyes, to see the dark head bowed over his own, but he was so tired. He licked his lips, and Harper's mouth was so close that he touched it with his tongue. Harper twitched then brought his mouth down on Sharpe's. Slow and light and lazy.
This is even better than a sex scene. Really, it is--because it says so much.
Thank you for posting. I'm deeply in love with this fic!
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Awwww, you make me blush.
Thank you for posting. I'm deeply in love with this fic!
Thanks! Posting was scary. I've only seen three of the movies, so I wasn't sure I had enough Sharpe in me to write it convincingly.
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I really love how the sense of touch, in all its varieties, suffuses the story in many different ways, without being the obvious subject or point of the story. Hands and lips and cloth and blood and hair...
And you've captured the sound of the characters to a tee - the words that pass between the men sound just right.
and pain spiderwebbed through the bones of Sharpe's face
Oooh, this description made me shiver.
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I think it was more a case of me striking it. Hurling my frustrated self against it time and time again until some of it ebedded itself in me.
I really love how the sense of touch, in all its varieties, suffuses the story in many different ways, without being the obvious subject or point of the story.
Thanks! Spent some time earlier in the week spinning my wheels while I was thinking just in terms of texture. Once I let that go things got better. Still, I wasn't sure that this totally "fit" the touch challenge.
And you've captured the sound of the characters to a tee - the words that pass between the men sound just right.
Oooo. I'm doing a happy dance!!!
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A man needed to have goals.
Right off the bat, one of my favourite lines in the whole story. Love the wryness of it.
Very, very much like the transition from now to flashback. That was really vivid, and stood out beautifully.
This part--
turned his head to the side, and sank his teeth into flesh.
"Whoreson bastard! He bit me."
--made me laugh, and it's so like Richard. Bloody man fights in his sleep, I swear.
He licked his lips, and Harper's mouth was so close that he touched it with his tongue. Harper twitched then brought his mouth down on Sharpe's. Slow and light and lazy.
Oh, lovely. I have to echo cinzia's sentiment here -- that part is amazing, and blazingly hot.
The characterizations were bang on, and the last line echoed the earlier one beautifully. 'Course, I have a thing for echoing lines in stories, so, yes. Wonderful!
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Ah, the Sharpe expert has spoken, and now I can relax. Was a bit worried about pulling it off. I should have dedicated this one to you as well, since it was you who led me to the Sharpe goodness.
Very, very much like the transition from now to flashback. That was really vivid, and stood out beautifully.
Phew! Mops brow. That part gave me the most pain and was the hardest to manage. It means a lot to hear that it worked.
Hee. Glad you like the biting. That wasn't planned, just happened. It did seem rather...appropriate. Also glad you liked the kiss. It was planned, but also seemed appropriate. ^_^
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*LOL* I don't know when/whether I earned that honour, but it's an amusing thought nevertheless.
I should have dedicated this one to you as well, since it was you who led me to the Sharpe goodness.
*SMOOCH* Do you have any idea how much this is feeding my ego? Probably not a good thing. ^_~ Must lead all who will follow down the garden path... I'm *so* glad you're writing Sharpefic, because I've been dying for good stuff on that front, and it seems some is finally surfacing. :::nudging you and someone else:::
That part gave me the most pain and was the hardest to manage.
You wouldn't know it.
Harper...was hurting him. Wouldn't hurt him. Harper had hurt him....
--Tumbles so effortlessly into--
Harper's fist connected with his jaw,
--and surfaces again with--
Sharpe struggled, swung blindly, and heard a grunt of surprise.--that, as a reader, it's very, very easy to drown in the memory and resurface alongside Richard. Elegantly done ( ... )
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Again, thanks for the flashback comments. I was fine with the re-entry into the present of the story, but the initial falshback had me worried. I didn't know if transition was smooth enough. Guess it was.
So... What would it take to get you to allow me to forward this to the sharpecc ML?
I am so easily bought by so many things.... ^_^
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congrats on your MOME nomination!
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